The second half of your story shows considerable improvement as your writing style develops. Keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to the next part of the series.
Author's Response: Thank you, as I said, it may take a while though.
I enjoy the way you've interwoven personal rivalries and politics within the frame of the military campaign. You might also want to include a few scenes of camp life to make it more realistic. A soldier's existence is really long episodes of tedium. punctuated by brief moments of terror. I look forward to your next installments.
Author's Response: Without giving too much away the next chapter has less conflict and is more about Brego's personal feelings so it will contain more camp life, thank you for the comment though.
Good action. Well done! I'm looking forward to the next installment.
Author's Response: Thany You Karlmir, always nice to hear your reviews as they are usually compliments and everyone loves that. rnThe next chappter will not be untill at least tomorrow as I have work and alot of college work to do. :( sorry