i think the characters in this story sound loving,, the imagery put forward is cool/ amazing but you really need to finish the story ;D xx
Author's Response: Thank you :) I will finish the story asap,still got 7 chapters to go though x
I love this chapter! :) I like Eruanna because she's not needy and whiney like I expected female characters to be. Oh and good job on the romance, too. :) Good luck on your exams! :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much :) hope you like the rest of it :) x
amazing imagery! you did a great job in describing the setting. it made your story rich and interesting. i'm excited to read the rest of your story. :) keep it up! :D
Author's Response: thank you :) this is just the start of a big adventure-this one is the fellow ship of the ring hope you enjoy the rest of it xx :)
Interesting story! :) Well written and realistic!!! but I must agree with Domestic Duchess, I am by no means an autor or anything but Ithink if you reread the chapters you would be able to fix it or you could ask the help of a Beta...
Hello! I see you are a new member here, so welcome! I will make one suggestion. YOu don't seem to have much if any punctuation. It makes it difficult to read or makes me not want to continue reading. I'm not a grammer nazi by any means, but it is necessary or it makes the story and sentences confusing. Good for you, though, for putting yourself out there and getting out of your comfort zone!
Author's Response: thank you, ill fix it asap i was in a hurry writing it :)