(Sorry Folks. I just gave a response to a Review by Formegil. I wanted to edit my response, but only saw the 'delete' option - and it took away his whole review. Here it was.)
Formegil: This is simply an excellent story! I have always (well, since I first read LotR) been interested in the history of Arnor and its successor states. There are only hints here and there, though, in the books besides the very general account in the Appendix A. This is very good gapfiller. All that happens is quite believable.The characters are also well-done and act convincingly. I will add this to my favourites.
Author's Response: Thank you Formegil! Several of our group of authors are also very interested in Arnor and it's daughter Kingdoms - the Northern Dunedain. We try really hard to make our story fit within the boundaries JRRT prescribed as canon... but he sure left a lot of room to work on this subject. And we're enjoying 'fleshing out' this one aspect of it. If you're interested in joining in on the fun, stop on by. :)
I completely adore this prologue. I love the concept of presenting it in 'campfire tale' form first---narrated by a bard in a safe environment with all the messy details streamlined and organized into resonance. Then going back in future chapters and telling it again, with all the confusion and grit and contradictions. I've never seen a prologue like this before. Excellent!
Author's Response: Than you, Pink Siamese, for your kind words. We did indeed put a lot of work in the Prologue. I will copy your review and post it on our site http://www.northernkingdom.proboards98.com - it will cheer the others up. Greetings, Gordis.
I like the outline of Odaragariel.
Quibble: The verb "to don" means to put something on yourself. Odaragariel's mother could ask her to don clothes, but not don her in them.
Author's Response: Thank you, Ria. Serenoli, who writes for Odaragariel, is one of the best writers among us, but she is not a native English speaker. We are most grateful for your corrections - now and in the future.
I enjoyed the way you elaborate on the politics of Tarnendur's position in this chapter. Gimilbeth sounds a little like the villain of a Teresa Edgerton novel: if so, she'll be wily and tough. It makes the fall of Rhudaur all too comprehensible.
Author's Response: I am very glad you enjoyed the parts about Gimilbeth – she is my own character and I have written most of this chapter. Yes, she is wily and tough indeed, but she is no traitor yet. She genuinely wants the King to prevail over the Hillmen. But she also wants to become Queen… There will be much more about Gimilbeth and her family in the future. Cheers, Gordis.
I really like the glimpse of Gimilbeth's grimoire. It gives me a picture of what the rationale of black magic might be in Middle Earth. At the same time, with all the attention spent on Gimilbeth and the various (scary!) bandits, it feels as though they've become the protagonists of the story.
Author's Response: We believe that the fear of death and the desire for power beyond the measure of humankind were the major reasons for Numenoreans to seek Dark knowledge. The bad guys indeed predominate - at least in the beginning of the story. It so happened that in our RPG the ones who liked to write for baddies outnumbered the ones who enjoyed writing for good guys. Now, with a few new players, the balance shifted somewhat – but still we need more good ones! We are most grateful for your reviews, Ria, – stay with us and welcome to our site www.northernkingdom.proboards98.com