That was so good! Very sad but touching, I don't think you're bad at this kind of thing, I liked it, I think I'll add it to my favorites!
Author's Response: Thank you. Of course, I really shouldn't have listened to that particular critic, (my younger brother who can't write at all) but he told me I was bad at it after I tried writing a tragedy once. It had a happy ending. Ah well, I'm glad someone likes it.