I think you hit the tone much better in this chapter. As for the cynicism part, I'm a fan: Do you know that the original Cynics took the pose of rejecting society's silliness to the extent of pretending to chase their own tails and other doggy behavior in public? Very cool!
Author's Response: very cool, yes. actually i lost my paper that i had everything written on so i had to write this from memory... it's different.... thanx!^_^
I'm sorry you feel so depressed about love -- believe me, real love can be found all over in the real world. (By all accounts, Professor Tolkien was deeply in love with his wife.)
Also, I NEED you to fix the grammar and spelling in this essay. If perfect love is not possible, perfect editing is.
Author's Response: .........
First sentence is a bit screwiff. You've spelt scene wrong and I think you mean "will be doubly bad if you are"
So true! *Sniffles* Don't want Sam anyway...Me want Elrohir... But he's not real either *Sobs noisely* See, this effects people who aren't enganged. Admittedly I am female. But I'm single... *Sighs* Very very depressing!
Author's Response: heh. i wrote during fourth period when i was trying not to get caught on the computer