This is a well-written beginning to your story. I really like it that you get into the adventure quickly and clearly.

I think that you may have over- powered your original character though: "She is excellent with a bow and cannot be defeated with a sword, but the magic is what I worry about. I know you taught her some . . ." It seems that a character who is already the best swordswoman in Middle Earth doesn't also need to have wizardly powers.

Author's Response: okay, thankyou for the review and I will deffinetly look into what you said. I agree with what your saying and saw it when I was writing the chapter. Thanks for the review!