I don't know why but I find the end slightly amusing, maybe it's because the simplicity just makes the implicated break-up so obvious and I can just imagine the look on the guys face when he realized he screwed it all up. Not as good as some of your other stuff but it's from you so it's still good - Taeliwren
By the way... I know this isn't relevant, but I've put another chapter on Last of the Eldar if you want to read it.
Author's Response: Oh, I read that, but I had to go after I finished reading it. I totally forgot the next time I was on. Sorry! I'll go review it now. ~Mel
I like the repeated line here, but - personally - I don't think this is one of your greatest poems, no offence meant.
Author's Response: Yeah, I know it's not one of my best. I was just stuck in my head and would not go away. It was fun to write though! Thanks for being honest! ~Mel
don't worry. the endings clear. the first bit up till stanza 4 sounded like scott hitting on me. help! i haven't written poetry in like a month! great poem!
Author's Response: Thanks Meg! I was sitting outside yesterday with Andrea and we decided we would each write a poem or song and then share. She wrote the most beautiful song, complete with a melody! It was so pretty! Has scott (he doesn't deserve a capital) let off yet? I guess I'll find out soon enough. Thanks for the praise! ~Mel