Well, its good to see some shameless elf porn with mary sue potential. And its so well written i wouldn't really mind if it became a disney-esque scenario. Haha. I'm really enjoying this so far, i hope you continue it.
I was just saying the other day I've never read a Mary Sue in fanfic. However, I like your writing and I find this interesting. It also occured to me that in virtually every published novel there is probably going to be a Mary Sue, obviously some better written than others. I have decided never to say anything unless it is encouraging, I am not a literary critic I just know what I like.
You come across as mature and passionate and heck yes, why not some Haldir smut? [ insert waggly eyebrows emoticon here] . Don't be nervous about posting your work; I was/am, but everything that any-one writes is a unique piece of creativity , it's something that a person has done, and comes from their imagination, mind and soul, whether they are 13 or 60. I like your style, I like the fact that you said [honestly] that you write to satisfy your need for Haldir-smut, lol, that means you feel passionately about the subject. In any book, or story, I always look for the author's passion to burn from the page or screen. That and description always pulls me in. I do not want to read a technical manual after all , or I would be.
So do go on. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for your comments, and your encouragement. I know there are a number of readers who do not like Mary Sue's, or AU, but I'm in for anything that's written well! I agree that in every novel, there are traces of the auhor in the narrative, so that there are a lot of stories that can be considered "Mary Sue's". Not just fan fic, but all literature. Or... maybe not. Just my opinion. This fan fic is Mary Sue, 100%. Wish it was me!!
This is getting good! Now I have to say hurry up with the next update! I'll race you! First one there is Queen of the hill! (just kidding) I haven't even started the next chapter yet let alone a title! hehe!
Very good start to the story. Keep it up! Getting very interesting and I can't wait for the next update.
By the way don't get scared or anything. I am a first time writer two so I know how you feel. It was finaly getting to upload your first story, the nervousness and then when you do it gets better after that.
Love the story so far. It sounds like it will be a very interesting story. Keep it up. By the way Haldir is one of my crushes too!