the descriptive prose thus far is excellent, and your depictions of medieval burial methods (following large-scale battle), the environment, and the social/judicial restructuring following the West's victory over Sauron give the first half of thei chapter depth and authenticity. Love it.
Unfortunately, I have to admit that I'm not a fan of Arwen, m'dear, regardless of who writes her. She's just not my cup of teas (too perfect/boring/annoying). And though I love the characterisation of Wormwood, not even your excellent writing skills have the power to sway my opinion on that point, or read her tale further. So sorry!
Might I iffer a tip for the future, though, as one author to another? Elvish vernacular! Awen and Luthilla's dialogue in this chapter struck me as more contemporary American than Middle-earth Westron. And I don't truly believe that Elrond would dissaprove of his beloved daughter's friend simply because she wasn't royal; he's just not elitist/sbobby enough for that.
You don't have a story featuring Wormwood, though, do you? Because - honestly - he is one of the most intriguing OCs I've ever read. You portray his character so vividly that I, as a reader, can't help being drawn to him. Funny how all the cads have 'worm' in their names, isn't it? Wormtongue, Wormtail, Wormwood ...
All the best,
Kara's Aunty ;)
Author's Response: Thanks for your review and constructive comments, Kara. I agree about the style of dialogue between Arwen and Luthillia, but I tend to write as my muse moves me. You also have to keep in mind that I am American.
Unfortunately, I don't have any other stories about or including Linner Wormwood. "Arwen's Journey" was my first attempt at writing LotR fan fiction and Wormwood was intended as a chief character in this story only. I actually hate the guy. He gets increasingly evil (if that's possible) as the story progresses.
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