I liked the way it was written. I also am so glad to see Haldir survive the war, for only in the film did he die, and yet people seem to think that is also in the books, when , of course it is not. Hope you write something again, soon!
The one thing I would say, which I would say to any-one who writes of Elves [ it is just a pointer, not against your writing at all] Tolkien never uses contrations when writing of Elves, or as them , eg: didn't, hasn't, wouldn't , etc. It it a more '' Mortal '' way of writing than Elven. And it seems to always detract from the wonder and ancientness of the Elves. That is not aimed at you in any way, as I very much like your writing style, but I find contractions do not enhance the Elves; although they are fine for Hobbits. ;)
Apart from that; I do like it a lot!
Author's Response: Thank you for the advice. I see what you mean about my writing and the elves, and will remember it in future stories.rnI'm glad you liked it.rnThank you again for the advice.