lol, yep, I enjoyed it, so it wasn't a complete waste of time getting in trouble with your maths teacher! Really good scene!
Author's Response: No it wasn't but trust me when i say she can be very scary sometimes. I'm sorry it's taken me so long to reply but i rncan't stop writing and i've been focusing on more on my fics that still aren't finished. Thanks for reviewing - Li
Ooh, scary premonition. I really like that she hurt Elrohir in the vision -- it makes it more ambiguous and disturbing. If I had to vote for how the story would go, I'd have it be one of those situations where her attempts to avert the vision actually make it happen, Oedipus-style. (I'd still hope everyone survived, though). Really, there are lots of ways it could go.
Btw, you're missing a few commas in the dialogue. It can make the sentences seem a little unwieldy.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and i'm sorry it's taken me so long to reply, i've kind of been neglecting this story ever since i rnfinished writing it. I suppose i can add it to my list of bad habits. Thanks for reviewing and i'm glad you liked it - Li
I definitly think your writing is getting better! I'm a bit confused as to why Sylfaen struck Elrohir, and why she flew into a tree when the orc pushed her downwards, unless it was a fallen tree...Out of curiousity, do you have a beta?
Author's Response: No i don't but i undetrstand what went wrong. i'll fix it asap