Reviews For Sidh an Saeros
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: arulia34z_taeliwrenz_darkside Signed
I liked it, a little bit rushed, you could have stretched it out a little longer but good nonetheless. An interesting choice of setting as well, not one I would have considered. Is this the rewritten version or . . ? Thanks for the interesting read - Taeliwren
Date: Oct 14 2008 08:49 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nieriel Raina Anonymous
This story had such potential in the beginning, but as soon as you got to the sex scene, I lost interest. It did not have the same flow or way of grabbing the reader. You stopped SHOWING and started TELLING, and when an author does that in a sex scene, it is rather boring. We all know peg A fits in Slot B, so how cna you make us want to read your version? There are a lot of POV changes that are jarring and take away greatly. You really rush. I think if you were to spend more time on this, you could make the whole thing flow as well as the beginning. Put us in their mind, let us feel what they feel. Don't just tell us this happened, then that happened. That isn't good story telling.
Date: Dec 26 2007 12:11 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Karlmir Stonewain Signed
That was certainly a happier ending than Tolkien's. The history of the First Age would have been somewhat different with Saeros still around. The eroticism was very artistic.
Date: Dec 24 2007 10:43 am [Report This]