I just gasped so loudly that I damaged my throat. That was fantastic! Ooooh the complications that must ensue from this! I cannot wait for the repurcussions (forbidden fruit, stay away from my neice i will rip off your balls etc etc). And even if my predicted repurcussions are not ture i'll still read it!
I love this story!!
YAAAAY!!! Thank the lord for that!! The tension was actually starting to hurt me inside and if Maggie and Dom didn't give in to their urges I was about to start wailing at the moon in frustration.
This is fantastic, I really really love the way you write, its funny and yet not forced (the best kind of funny) and i love the contrasting storylines; Dom and Maggie give relief to Orlando and his mysterious Elfen friend (i cant remember her name..:s) which I find I can get too bogged down in the hardcore stuff and have to take breaks, but you've done the breaks for me!
Orlando contemplating what is classed as Necrophilia made me laugh out loud. And a perfect way to end the chapter.
To conclude (this is an essay of a review.) I love this story.
You write emotion really well, and I like how you've included different characters.
Spelling question: Is ambulence the British spelling?
Author's Response: Nope, that was a typo I've been making since Grade 3... Noted and edited. Thanks Ria! xx L
"Oh my god, he thought in despair, I don't deserve a cock."
I love this!! Haha, i bet he manages to prove he is worthy of his peep.
So glad you updated! I love a good chase (especially when the men are fools, i mean beautiful fools, but fools none the less.)
Author's Response: Hahahah His peep? I like! Thank you so much for both your reviews...rnI am gradually tying up all the loose ends and finishing the story, so it'll be here soon... rnCheers, L xx
This is very good so far; Dom trying to ask Maggie out was my favourite part, so funny! x
Author's Response: Thanks Kim! I admit I giggled a bit when I was writing that...rnBecause parts of it are oh so true! HehehernCheers, L xx
thise seems really good and i'd love to read more. i like the interactions between the characters and the descriptions. thanks for writing and update soon x
Author's Response: Thank you! I like your handle by the way...rnYeah anyways, thanks for taking the time to review, and I will update as often as possible!rnCheers, L xx
Through fear of making everyone you burst into song i'm still going to say it; i would like some more of this one.
I really like your writing style. And i like where the story seems to be going. I'll be dragging my sorry backside over here to check for updates.
But yes, this is really good so far, i really enjoyed reading it.