Good, but as you say, this story need a little work. I'm giving it 8/10 on a score rating, like they do on HPfanfiction, and I'll say just this - I love the title, although it does sound a bit slashy. Otherwise, it is great! No spelling or grammar mistakes, and the text chosen is lovely! Well done!
Well, I don't know the work you posted which you say was so dreadful, but I think you are a very deep person, both your pieces, this and the one on the Nazgul deal with hidden emotions, with the characters and sufferings and feelings of people. I think you have a talent, and that will just continue to grow. If it's there - it's there. Perhaps we can see some longer stories from you in the future. I wouldn't be too hard on yourself, especially with these two pieces, which show maturity and thought. I am not sure how old you are now, but I certainly wish I had written like this when I was much younger, as I would be a great deal better now! So keep writing. Take care.
This was a very beautiful story. I really think that that pretty much sums it all up. You captured Faramir's feelings perfectly. I'm adding this one to my favorites...it was truely wonderful. Take care, and God bless (I hope to see you post more soon!)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It has been a long time. You had me as one of your favorite authors when I posted my original monstrosities, so I hope I did much better. I hope you are well!rn~*~PhantomsDaughter13~*~rn"Quel esta, a'maelamin"