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Reviewer: Deadly Shadow Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/03/08 - 02:09 pm Title: Alone

*cry* I can't rate!!!!!!!!!

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Date: 25/02/08 - 09:02 pm Title: Alone


Author's Response: YAY!!!!!!!!!!!

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Date: 23/02/08 - 04:23 pm Title: Alone


Author's Response: how are you spelling that again?

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Date: 22/02/08 - 08:57 pm Title: Alone


Author's Response: *sigh*

Reviewer: Deadly Shadow Signed [Report This]
Date: 21/02/08 - 05:31 pm Title: Alone


P.S. (it's me, Lizzie, I forgot what ,my other penname was so I made a new one)

Author's Response: *sigh* I kinda guessed that when I saw the newest member thing..............

Reviewer: Karlmir Stonewain Signed [Report This]
Date: 18/02/08 - 12:33 pm Title: Alone

I'm sure Sam's duties as Mayor of the Shire would have meant he would be away for weeks at a time on official business. But I'm sure that Rosie's poem would have earned her a lot of hugs, kisses and tears of joy upon his return. You put a lot of thought and emotion into your first poem. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed [Report This]
Date: 17/02/08 - 07:08 pm Title: Alone

You have a couple of spelling mistakes in here:
Smiling, not smileing
Vanished, not vanised,
Rumors, not rumer
Sometimes, not somrtimes

However, barring the spelling mistakes, I really enjoyed this poem. It captures something indescribably sad, yet hopeful.

One critique I might make is the single word "But..." in the middle of the poem: It works well as a leading line to the last stanza, but I think there might be some more "in character" synonyms . . . Maybe "However" or "Still" or something along those lines.

I hope you write some more poems!


Author's Response: Thank you so much! I always have with spelling.

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