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Reviewer: NKW Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/07/08 - 05:04 pm Title: Chapter 1: An Unexpected Visitor

That is indeed a page-turner! Ever thought to make a living writing adventure stories? Also loved how you have incorporated this reference to the King favoring those Northmen over his own people... It just neatly ties the story to its time-frame. Keep up the good work - Gordis

Author's Response: Thank you very much! Now that's a new idea to me, to make a living by writing stories. As for the reference, I thought it would be suitable to incorporate a 'voice of the people', so to speak. I am such canon freak that I felt that besides the adventures of the foster-brothers I should write a little also of the political issues in Gondor. Those will remain in sidelines, though.

Reviewer: Ria Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/07/08 - 03:33 am Title: Chapter 1: An Unexpected Visitor

Again, well-written, Formegil, with a promising main character. I like Belhast's rather world-weary but still hopeful outlook, and I like the way you give us a good picture of his life and his setting through the brief first scene.

The irregular verb forms are giving you some trouble (and they do for many native English speakers as well). "Wringed" should be wrung, "Do not haste" could be hasten me, or be hasty and "adviced" should be advised. Nutty darn language, huh? One more question: in most older and tarot type decks the hearts are cups instead -- are you describing a transitional type where one suit has changed into its modern form but the others haven't yet?

Author's Response: Thank you! It seems I must take look at the ol' good grammar book of mine. I'll correct the errors when I have time. As for the suits, I myself realized that they are not wholly correct after fecthing a fortune-telling manual from library. In my memory the tarot suits and the Central European ones had mixed up. Let the hearts stand, but I'll change the acorns to coins or pentacles. But good to know you like Belhast and his first scene.

Reviewer: NKW Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/07/08 - 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 1: An Unexpected Visitor

Wow - isn't that intriguing? Very captivating description of the main character and the fortune-telling. I can't wait to see what happens next - Gordis

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I did a little research in the fortune-telling before writing this. It felt that it would be a suitable profession for an ex-thief and ex-fraud. Somehow felt I felt it would be a good idea to give the main character a somewhat unusual occupation.

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