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I cannot die, I am immortal. lol. Hmmm....looks like Leggy is doing the opposite of Gandalf's wise words and forming an attachment...
ha! sucking the pony's blood. thats got to give you some odd indigestion when you're used to human blood...
ooooh. NEVER go through a girl's things! Bad ranger!
Well, you could have extended her reaction a little more...maybe a few "open/close mouth" moments, lol. In all, not a bad chapter.
To the next!
1: was Gandalf's shout supposed to be "crebain"? Because it only shows an exclamation mark.
2: You changed pronouns in the middle...from "he" to "she". Was that purposeful?
3: On to chapter 3!!!
Hmmm....interesting beginning, if very short. On to chapter 2!
Well, this certainly shows what most guys think of. Hah! Girls would rather go shopping, at least I would.
The plot really thickens. This is good about the ring because it shows that if anyone else came to Middle-earth that the ring would reach out to them. I really like this.
I don't want to die either. Geez, what's your problem??!! *Laughs* Sorry! This is really interesting, honestly. I don't know what else to say. Good job?
Author's Response: Thanks. n Are you ok with me mentioning your name in the end notes next chapter?
I like my blood just fine so I'm reviewing. Please don't send Annabeth after me!!!
This is very interesting and I can't wait to read more.
interesting few chapters, this has got to be the shortest chapter i've ever seen lol.
keep up the good work
Yep, Annabeth's not human alright. But things are moving a teensy bit too fast. I like the way you write, and the style draws me in. Again, I felt sorry for Annabeth when she was puking. Must be horrible not to be able to digest food. Great chapter. Keep up the good work! : )
Author's Response: its supposed to be a couple days later but i forgot to right that in. love the input.
interesting, i'd like to see where you are going with this.
bit of a short chapter though. keep up the good work
Author's Response: I know. I was going to make it longer, but it would mess up the story.
Poor Annabeth. It really must suck not to be able to digest any food. I do like the twist you put on her identity - species wise. Can't wait for the next chapter! : )
This is very interesting so far! Please continue soon.
Maybe you shouldn't have made her react like that. Maybe she should be like okay . . . I do not know where I am and who are these people. Not like . . . omg they're gonna kill me!
Just a thought.
Author's Response: Yeah, but i tried to look at it from a normal persons POV. I mean, if i had woken up like she had, i would have been worse. WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAy worse. By the way, what did you think of her dream?
This is very interesting. It's very clever and you have my attention. I thought I should review before you send your friend after me. I like my blood where it is.
Author's Response: Gotta love Annabeth.
great start to the story, a vampire is always a cool character to have. keep up the good work
Author's Response: Thanks!
Hmm . . . interesting. I'm always up for some vampires, sounds a lot liek the Cullens from Twilight this one does but do they have a name? I think I shall continue to read this - Li
Author's Response: Yeah, her names Annabeth. She was once a druid.