If you're looking for a beta reader, there's a great site at www.perfectimagination.com It's a site that has a listing of beta readers who have to write a test and are all categorised.
If you can't get that to work out drop me a line and I'd be happy to help!
Author's Response: Wow, that is fantastic! Thank you so much! I will definately check out that site and see if there is anyone who can help me out and if not I might take you up on that offer. Thanks again, I really apprechiate that :)
The story you tell here is charming, but to be blunt, you rather murder all the rules of grammar. If you used more commas or shortened your sentences, or both, your story would be much more readable and this story deserves to be readable.
Also be careful not to use apostrophes in plurals, but only possessives. I'm not sure why you've put apostrophes into words like Minas and Edoras.
Maybe you could consider getting a beta reader to help you make the story more accessible. As it stands the language will put a lot of readers off, even though your plot, structure and characterisation are lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you for your blunt review, I do apprechiate it. As you correctly pointed out, I do not have a beta reader and am at abit of a loss of where to find one, though in the future I might have just another person read over things before I post them. on this site, or anywhere else for that matter. Thank you again, you have definately given me something to think upon.
That is very sweet i like it. Especially how you only hint at who the girl was. Clever. -Lady of the Lake
Author's Response: Thank you! I am so glad you enjoyed it! Yes, I find it is much more fun to kind of skirt around who someone is sometimes but it is tricky becuase I found myself nearly just coming right out with her name again and again. Thank you so much for the view!
Aww I love this! She is such a little moppet and I think this meeting is so sweet :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I had been thinking about this for a while, and I saw no reason why such a meeting would be impossible though I would certainly wager that twenty or so years later either of them would have remebered it, Well, Aragorn perhaps but I doubt Anwyn would have rembered as I can't really put a definate age to her in this but she was very young. This is part of the mental stretch I am doing, lol, the one shot can be a beatiful thing and I needed to wander off and write something different but now I am back into editing the story. Thank you so much for the review!