I rather like abstract creative writing, as it was the first writing I did myself. It's nice to see descriptions of nature, seasons, weather, written by a ( relatively ) young person, in a time when there is so much superficiality.
In paragraph five you used the word slowly three times, I know finding substitute words in a story is advised, but nothing in the sixth paragraph works well. It's been a long time since I did creative writing and poetry as opposed to stories, so I am not sure now if there are rules, but frankly stuff 'em if now it is supposed to be verbs and lush description is ' unfashionable.' That's just laziness. I like the kind of thought and description that has gone into this. :)
Author's Response: Thanks. I didn't even notice that Used slowly more then once. Ussaly I try to have differnt words but it just semed like the right word.