I like your characterization of Elrond. I found this very authentic again. Elrond and Vilya kept Imladris a haven from evil for thousands of years, and would doubtless be cautious at some-one appearing unheralded on their borders. They did, of course, know the Dúnadain, who were Men.
Reflected in the mirror were signs of a rope burn around his wrists.
Oh pants, a cliffie!
Very good! :)
Author's Response: Thank you again for the praise! I hold your reviews in very very very high esteem :)
I think you should keep this story – it is a very good start.
I thought the beginning was well written. You gave the description of Brandon awaking this eerie effect – which was cool.
I liked his reactions -- and his fear is remarkable. I honestly felt scared with him and feared for him. Fear *is* a funny thing. I completely agree – “it dulls the mind, but sharpens the senses”. I wonder why… *shrugs*
I loved the encounter with Elves – I thought that was real, as opposed to other stories where the Tenth-walker is immediately accepted into Imladris. And I like how Brandon compares the Elf to an Alien. I would too if I had never seen LotR.
Overall, very, very good job; Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks, I will!
Hmm, you know, I like this. Your writing style is also very good. :) I think the reaction of the Imladrian Elves is authentic, having looked at way too many stories where the girl who falls into Middle-earth is immediately accepted like the reincarnation of Lúthien.
I would like to read a mature, well written story of a guy in Middle-earth. ( Actually I'd like to read a story of a soldier in the SAS joining the Fellowship, but unless Andy McNab - Who was in the SAS and wrote Bravo Two Zero - writes it, I doubt I will see one d;-)
I wouldn't give up on it, although there are so many falls-into-Middle-earth - out there, that does not mean you cannot write a good one. In fact if there were more well written ones they wouldn't have such a bad name. Pink Siamese's, Hobbitland is the only one I have read which I like so far, but Pink could write about a teabag and make it enthralling.
So well done, if I were you, keep going, if you carry on this way it will be very good :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
This is really great! The fear from Brandon, reminds me of many dreams I have had of my own, only his is not a dream.
I wish you good writing.
Author's Response: It may be a dream...or it may not. Thanks for the well wishing, and I hope you keep reading!