Great work on the story so far! Keep updating please and make sure your paragraphs on description aren’t too long! Otherwise I have no complaints! The scene with Merry and Pippin at the end of the chapter is so beautiful it brought tears to my eyes! There are no grammar or spellings mistakes that I can see, as per usual, and your style of writing is brilliant. However you do like to make Merry call Pippin ‘dear’ a lot – is this typical of your writing style? Just one of those little habits that are hard to break? Because I think it’s so sweet! The lyrics from the song that are in the story are cute and appropriate, and the band Rascal Flatts – sorry. I’ve never heard of them. You must think I’m so behind on the times, and yes, I am. I am not an up-to-date person, and I don’t know much about the eighties, seventies or sixties. However the chapter title and the title of the story are awesome. I love the relationship between all of the Hobbits, especially Merry and Pippin, and the way that you portray Diamond seems interesting and correct. I love this story and hope that you respond to this review soon – wishing you all the best, and a further few plot bunnies,
Author's Response: Thanks for all your wonderful comments! Which long description paragraphs would you be referring to? I honestly thought that I hadn't included as many as normal in this chapter. Let me know- constructive crit is good and appreciated. I loved writing that Merry-Pippin scene at the end of the chapter, and I love making my readers happy-cry! About the "dear" thing: in my mind, as probably in yours, Merry and Pippin are as close to each other as Frodo and Sam are to each other. They have been through an incredible amount together, and feel so close to each other that it's hard for me to describe their relationship in words (but I sure as heck am trying!) Merry feels especially close to Pippin at this point in time because he very recently came so close to losing him forever. Merry calls him "dear" because that's exactly what he is: extremely dear to Merry's heart. Merry also view's Pippin's actions in allowing Diamond to go and study with Mistress Hibbs as selfless, for remember, this is the time of the male-dominated society. Pippin could have technically stopped her if he wanted to, but it's not in his personality. Keith Urban, one of my favorite singers, said in his song "You're My Better Half": "They say behind every man is a good woman, but I think that's a lie, 'cause when it comes to you, I'd rather have you by my side." I think this quote pretty much sums up Pippin and Diamond's relationship, as well as the fact that they're completley, head-over-heels in love with each other. (As you can see, I get much of my inspiration for my stories from music!) Anyhow, the fact that Merry views Pippin as such a morally good person results in his frequent use of the affectionate term. In return, Pippin sees Merry's choice to stay and take care of him all by himself for three whole months as equally selfless, and he does occasionally call him "dear" as well. I do have to admit that I was inspired by the movie "The Chronicles of Narnia: Prince Caspian". Aslan calls Lucy "dear one", and it just touched me because it felt like an intimate term to describe an intimate friendship. I'm not going to say "Oh, my gosh, you've never heard of Rascal Flatts, where have you been?". I'm only going to say that you need to check them out because they are AWESOME!!!!!! They are not from previous decades but rather, released their first album in 2000. They are a country group that crosses over with rock, and their music is amazing, inspriational, and fun to listen to. If you don't mind me asking, where are you from? I've noticed that you spell the word "favorite" with a "u", which implies that you are from a European country. I'm from southeastern North Carolina, USA, in case you were wondering. If you're from Europe that might explain why you haven't heard of Rascal Flatts, as they are a country group and it's probably not as popular over there as it is here down south. I'll see if I can find links to music videos for "Every Day" and "Then I Did", as well as lyrics to the songs. They're worth listening to! Oh, and don't worry: I'm not up-to-date either! I just got my first ipod this Christmas! I'm glad you like my portrayal of Hobbit relationships. Because I'm curious: what exactly do you like about the way I portray Diamond? Since Tolkien never mentioned her except in the Appendices, I had to create her character completely from scratch. I'd love to know specifically what you think of her, because to me she's a very interesting character! Thanks for your continued reviews and support. I've added you to my favorites, in case you haven't noticed! Plot bunnies to you, too, -Traveller
Very good. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm trying to write as much as possible, but with four AP classes and a senior project research paper due in a month, I'm not finding a lot of time. But I love to write as much as you love to read it, so I'll keep trying! Keep R&Ring! -Traveller
I have one thing to say to you..."Life Is A Highway". Man Rascal Flats is one of my favorite bands! I have a question, is this before or after the War of the Ring? all I want to know. I also have another question, would you like to do a challenge? If not I would understand
Nice job on the story so far, keep up the good work:)
(Dunedain Ranger of the North)
Author's Response: Yay, another Rascal Flatts fan!!!! You'd think that there would be more country fans in Southeastern North Carolina, but they are precious few at my school... I love "Life is a Highway", but my absolute favorite Rascal Flatts song and favorite song ever is "Where You Are". This story takes place after the War of the Ring. Frodo has been to Valinor but decided to return to Middle Earth. For this to make more since, read my first story, "Of Magic and Friendship"- it is the prequel to this story. This story begins exactly a week after that one finishes, so reading it would probably clear up a lot of your questions. I might be interested in doing a challenge, depending on what it is and how much time I have (very busy schedule!). Thanks for your comments and keeping R&Ring! -Traveller