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Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
Things aren't looking too good for the men... :(
Ah, a dream-catcher. That's exciting!
The flood really happened? I wonder why Ric's dreaming of it now.
Yay! Walendithas got the sword! I didn't expect him out that quickly. :)

Author's Response: yep.. the flood really did happen :) well.. he cant control them.. the diamonds are making it happen..
Date: Jun 23 2009 02:47 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
I liked this line; nice and inspirational: “For the biggest battle these lands have ever seen. We will confront these beasts and win. You will march into hell and you will come out!!” shouted the leader.
Ricgretor's dream was whimsically happy and sad. I suppose there's a metaphor behind that wave...?
What??? Belneiros killed them? :( Who exactly? I suppose I’ll find out…

Author's Response: the wave isnt a metaphor.. it was a wave.. a massive one.. it happened lol youll find out more next chapter :)
Date: Jun 17 2009 01:14 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
Yay! I've started at last.
Oooh, more complications. Seven invisible giant evil beasts? (More yay.)
All the descriptions of the cold made me happy it is June here.
Hmm, I wonder if Walendithas will have any luck in persuading Belneiros?

-Kitt :)

Author's Response: yay :) Walendithas might have a hard time.. then again, he might not.. we will just have to see :) thanks for the review :D
Date: Jun 14 2009 12:16 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 37 Reviewer: diamondmasters Signed
Origo. Your stories are great. I always enjoy them. I do have trouble pronouncing the names haha but I did when I first read LOTR s too.

Author's Response: lol.. youll get use to them.. just say them how you think they should sound :)
Date: Mar 04 2009 11:58 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 29 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
You asked me to review, so here I am. :)

Your stories are very fast paced, which makes them easy to read. I think more description of the thoughts and feelings of the protagonists would flesh it out a little - and give readers time to catch their breaths a little. In long stories, you usually find times of action interspersed with quieter times. These are often used to concentrate on the characters, to tell more about their characters, how they feel, thus making people interested in them.
You have a tremendous amount of dialogue. Dialogue is important, but I would cut some out, myself, or intersperse it with description.

Also, you may get more readers if you separate each line of dialogue with a space...

'Like this.' she said.

' Like what?' He asked.

'Watch me, I'll show you,' she smiled.

...because reading on a monitor is much harder on the eye than reading in a book. And when the chapter looks almost like one block of text, it can be offputting - it can give people a headache.

I think your strength is in action and dialogue, now you need to concentrate on a little *padding* by writing feelings and descriptions.

Hope that helps!

Take care.

Author's Response: Thanks :) i have Dreams and Flash backs to more peaceful times.. i normally just copy and paste it.. i dont think about separating the dialogue.. keep on reviewing :D
Date: Feb 28 2009 08:36 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: callerofcrows Signed
Good job, keep writing!

Author's Response: Thanks :) Keep on Reading :)
Date: Feb 19 2009 09:45 am [Report This]
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