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Title: The Truth Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
I *loved* Eothain's mother. Sharp and understanding - she was perfect for Beomia. I'm glad too to know the truth about Orvyn. That's a an understandable conflict - how could she help it? - should he have died for those children and left her? It's still nice to know he died with honor.
I also liked your Eothain. 'Too big for his stirrups' - ha!
Aw, that's sweet of Wulf. :) First swearing he won't let Aiken marry her and second offering to give her Annis.
I wonder how much Annis knows. Does she see her sister in Bee?
I'm in suspense! Will she really marry Aiken...?

Author's Response: Eothain's mother appeared on the page completely of her own did Beomia, as a matter of fact. Can you believe that this was supposed to be a three-part ficlet about a boy and his horse!? It just took off in its own direction! Yes, I thought she (and the readers) deserved the truth about Orvyn. Well, actually, the reader knowing what he did is kind of necessary...but I don't want to give too much away ;)
Date: Sep 04 2009 06:27 pm [Report This]
Title: "I'll be a spinster first!" Reviewer: tinara Signed
Just what is this woman thinking! Surely things can't be that bad for Beomia and her family that her mother had to catch the first suitor? I hope she comes to her senses - remembering what it was at this age - obviously not, otherwise she wouldn't talk like this.
Please update soon, I'm looking forward to how Anna and Derry will solve this mystery!

Author's Response: Well, it's a fairly primitive's not so long ago even in our world that sex before marriage was heavily frowned upon! The next chapter (which I plan to post tomorrow or the day after) is staying in Rohan, but we will be moving back to Derry and Anna soon. Thanks, as always, for reading and reviewing :-)
Date: Aug 30 2009 01:17 pm [Report This]
Title: "I'll be a spinster first!" Reviewer: Spiced Wine Signed
This was a great, and highly believable conversation between Anna and Derry, and well worth waiting for, although their confusion is no less, in fact it is probably doubled! But at least they can talk and bounce ideas off one another.

Lovely transition to Rohan, and a great deal of tension within the family.
Oh dear, poor Beomia, in the marriage mart for a much older man because gossip has damaged her reputation. Ot did almost seem, that in a society where women were less emancipated than now, some of Anna was coming through Beomia in her last outburst!

Thank-you for the update. :)

Author's Response: Thank you!! :-D yes, they're going to be comparing notes and seeing how their stories/memories/dreams fit together. And Anna and Beomia are, in some ways, very similar...Beomia is perhaps more openly emotional, but they share quite a few character traits, as we shall see later ;-)
Date: Aug 28 2009 02:34 pm [Report This]
Title: "I'll be a spinster first!" Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
I am glad to see an update! How understandable was Derry’s anger here. Seriously, Anna’s story would have sounded insane, even mocking. But at least they still remained friends at the end. Now what can they do… ah, nothing, I guess. This is a strange thing they share.

Poor Beomia. :( So the whole town think she’s disgraced? Can she ever prove her honor now, I wonder. That’s not a happy situation: marry an old bald man or be a spinster. I can see where her mother is coming from, though – it’s hard to find a good man.

Ah, the little foal is unlocking the stable! With her intelligence, who knows what else she’ll get into... Can’t wait to find out! ^_^

Author's Response: Hey Kitt! Thanks for the review :-) yeah, I did think it would be ridiculous to expect Derry to believe Anna, but like you say, at least they're still friends! And as for Beomia, her honour and the'll just have to keep reading :p
Date: Aug 28 2009 07:32 am [Report This]
Title: Dinner and a Discovery Reviewer: tinara Signed
I#m really drawn into it - and then this! Please update soon, I would like to know, how these two sort everything out.

Author's Response: I'll do my best to update soon! I'm so glad you're enjoying it; it's great to have a new reader :-) thanks for the review.
Date: Jul 01 2009 09:22 am [Report This]
Title: Dinner and a Discovery Reviewer: Narya Signed
Oooops - typo in my response to Spiced Wine's review. "Unwillingly" was supposed to read "willingly." Temporary brain meltdown :p anyway this was the only way to correct it without deleting the review - and I don't want to do that :-)
Date: Jun 29 2009 02:49 pm [Report This]
Title: Dinner and a Discovery Reviewer: Pink Siamese Signed
I could really just hijack most of Spiced Wine's review...the dialogue in this chapter is superb: natural rhythm, lovely pacing, and a deepening level of intimacy that is skillfully handled and believably presented. I love how you're revealing the story to us a little bit at a time, creating a little bit of that same intimacy between the story and the reader, which of course draws us in ever tighter. And the cliffie is great! Lovely work, as usual. ;)

Author's Response: I could really just hijack most of Spiced Wine's review...woot! Thank you so much *glows* when I get a nice review from you, SW or both, it's like a teacher putting a gold star on my work - makes my day! Like I was saying to Kitt, I have to pace myself in terms of how quickly I reveal the info - now I know where I'm going (and it's not where I thought I was going originally, but then again it never is) I can't wait to share it with the readers. Glad you enjoyed the dialogue, too; I enjoyed writing it. Thank you for reading and reviewing, as ever!
Date: Jun 29 2009 02:07 pm [Report This]
Title: Dinner and a Discovery Reviewer: Spiced Wine Signed
Wonderful chapter. I love the developing empathy in the dialogue between Derry and Anna, and her sympathy for his needing to talk and not to reveal her own sorrow is delicate and shows much about her personality.

Oh wow, you had to leave it at this cliffy! O_o Damn!

Super chapter!

Author's Response: Yay, thank you!!! Yeah, there had to be a the rate I'm updating, I'd lose my readers if I didn't give them something to come back for! XD Yes, Anna's definitely a thoughtful, sensitive type. *SPOILER* In later chapters, we'll see how she spent a lot of her childhood in her sister's shadow - albeit unwillingly - which has had a huge influence on how she interacts with her peers now. She's used to having to be quiet and listen.
Date: Jun 29 2009 11:18 am [Report This]
Title: Dinner and a Discovery Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
OH! Shocking revelation! He was actually Beomia's fiance? This just keeps spiraling into more and more fascinating stuff… I guess I said that before but it's true. :)
Derry's becoming far more complex than I would have guessed - ya know, beyond the piercing. ;) When Anna is talking with him, I feel very much in her head. Their evolution from shyness to ease was believable.

Author's Response: Yep, he's Orvyn...kind of... :p I'm glad you're still enjoying it, that you can identify with the characters and that you find it interesting. I have to try and keep myself from info-dumping; I have the whole plot pretty much settled (and a lot of it already written out longhand) but now I know where I'm going I kind of want to write it all in at once! I'm doing my best to take things at a steady pace and let the readers digest things, so let me know if I start moving too fast. Thanks for the review! :-D
Date: Jun 29 2009 10:47 am [Report This]
Title: The New Boy Reviewer: Ndil Signed
Well written! I am enjoying this story too. I hope you get the screen time anytime soon! Keep updating...

Author's Response: Hi Ndil! Sorry I didn't get back to you earlier, I'm usually much quicker than this *slaps wrists* thank you for the compliments...and, by way of apology, the next chapter is now up ;-) so feel free to read on!
Date: Jun 09 2009 07:52 am [Report This]
Title: The New Boy Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Oooh, who is he? intrigue! I love it. Love the pacing, the characters and that thread of mystery and links to Middle-earth you weave in, that is so irresistible, and so well written!

Author's Response: Thanks, xFanarix! *Grins* I'll do my best to get another chapter uploaded this weekend, and put out an LJ post etc. Now I can't have the computer whenever I want, it feels like my left arm's been cut off! Thank you for reviewing, as ever.
Date: Jun 04 2009 01:01 am [Report This]
Title: The New Boy Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
Ah, yeah, that's a pretty typical teacher scheme... Ooh, but Derry does sound nice (excepting that mom would kill me for marrying a guy with piercings, so that’s as far as it goes for me ;)). So he's got a situation like Anna's; maybe something to do with the fellow from ch. 4??? I think I feel excited for Anna, anyway, for getting to know him. It is nice for her that he does not look at her always in sympathy.
*nods* Ever since getting back from the Uni its been a struggle to squeeze in computer time. Brothers and their comp games. Sigh.
Really enjoying this, once again! :D

Author's Response: Thanks, Kitt! As for what Derry has to do with the guy from c4, read on...and yeah, I'm in a similar situation to you computer-wise, though in my case it's my sister revising for exams. Don't think I take priority over that :p
Date: Jun 03 2009 06:03 pm [Report This]
Title: Prologue Reviewer: Pink Siamese Signed
I really love what you're doing with this story. Another reason the Rohirrim may geld their horses would have to do with the organization of bloodlines---they'd be keeping some sort of breeding records, at the very least to prevent accidental inbreeding, and also to document exceptional lineage. Once a stallion has sired x-number of colts, snipetty-snip. I'm looking forward to the big climax, where people start to figure out what's going on. :)

Author's Response: Oooh, I never thought of that as a possibility - thanks, Pink! I'm glad you're enjoying it still; the lights are going to start witching on very soon! Thank you for the review :-)
Date: May 28 2009 03:31 pm [Report This]
Title: A Very Odd Dream Reviewer: Anwyn Signed
You will proably get tired of me saying this pretty much every review but I would not say it if I did not mean it but I freaking LOVE this story. Just when I think it could not pssibly get any more intriguing you somehow managed to kick it up another notch!

Though something leapt out at me, only a small thing but you mentioned that Brego was a gelding. It never really occured to me wether or not the Rohirrim would geld their horses but it certainly made sense that they would as it does change a horses temperment and makes them more docile and easier to work with...except for Brego of course ;)

Beomia is growing into quite an intresting character and I like how you are using Brego as a character of sorts as for a Horse he really does have abit of a rough story even if that is all the work of movie verse I liked him as he was portrayed be a georgeous stallion who does high level dressage and I believe Viggo Mortensen ended up buying him after filming was done. There, abit of useless trivia for you, LOL.

Beomia/Anna got off rather lightly with just a bruise, a kick that hard could have resulted in a crushed clavicle though that is perfectly intriguing!

As always, looking forward to more! :)

Author's Response: Hi Anwyn! Thank you so much :-) as I'm sure you know, no writer ever gets tired of hearing their work is appreciated - I write it for my own enjoyment, but if others like it too then that's just the icing on the cake! The reason I made Brego a gelding was because of an article I read somewhere on the internet not too long ago. It complained about how the heroes of fantasy stories always seemed to go charging around on their noble stallions, when in reality (according to the article) any sensible hero would geld their horses as it makes them more temperamentally reliable. I'm not a horsey person so I've been trying to read around about them, and I took the author of the article at their word - I don't think Theodred would have taken any unnecessary risks with his horse. The reason Brego is so wild now isn't because he's a gelding or stallion, it's because of how traumatised he was by the war. And as for the bruise thing...I think I can safely leave Anna with a bruise since she's almost getting the "echoes" of what happens to Beomia, but do you think I need to injure Beomia a bit more severely!? Thanks for reviewing, as ever :-)
Date: May 27 2009 06:52 pm [Report This]
Title: A Very Odd Dream Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed
Oh blimey...even though you've told me where you're going with this I still enjoy it. Wulf and Bee are cute together - reminds me of someone, somehow :p

Good last line.

Author's Response: Cheers! Glad you like it, thanks for reading :-) ps - what happened to my phone call!?
Date: May 27 2009 04:45 pm [Report This]
Title: A Very Odd Dream Reviewer: callerofcrows Signed
Very nice!!! I'm so anxious as to what happens next! When's the next update due? Awesome chapter!!!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you! :-) did you get my email? I'm really sorry, my account's playing up again and I can't access it, so if you've sent me anything and I haven't replied within 24 hours it's most likely because it hasn't come through, so you might want to try using my uni account again, if you still have that saved. Next chapter will be up tomorrow or the day after; it's written, it's just a case of typing up and editing. Thanks for the review!
Date: May 27 2009 11:54 am [Report This]
Title: A Very Odd Dream Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
She actually was Beomia and has a bruise! Cool. Every chapter gets more interesting. I always love the descriptions of the little white foal… she sounds so adorably sweet. I really liked the whole tie-together of Beomia’s initial fear of death to risking herself for her brother. I can truly feel her sadness for Orvyn, especially after the flashback with him. He seemed like a nice guy, it’s really too bad. :(
Ha, so Brego isn’t a foal-killer? Nice reversal, that he and Annis are actually friends. :)


Author's Response: Thank you Kitt! There will be more twists and turns before this is out, believe me ;-) and nope, Brego is anything but a foal killer! Glad you're still reading and enjoying, thanks for the review.
Date: May 27 2009 10:21 am [Report This]
Title: A Very Odd Dream Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Oj wow! I could have been in Rohan then, feeling that bitter wind and drizzle - beautiful descriptions! At the end, I was just stunned! Everything is weaving together brilliantly. Anna might dismiss everything else, but not the hoof-shaped bruise. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Author's Response: Thank you!! The next chapter will be up soon, it's written, I just need to type it up :-)
Date: May 27 2009 07:45 am [Report This]
Title: Time Flies Reviewer: Dunedain ranger of the North Signed
Mysterious! That's the word I am seeing as describing this chapter! In her dreams she sees a white foal, but what she doesn't realize is that she is seeing her sister; alive and well! Very good chapter, and the truth is time does fly, and you can never get it back! What you should do is use the time you have now and live your life, somethings in the past are best forgotten; mostly bad memories not the good ones. Good chapter, again, keep up the good work.

Sincerely, your fellow fan fiction writer,

Author's Response: Hey Dune, thanks for the review! :-) I'm glad you enjoyed it. You're absolutely right that you should live your life while you have it; my little sister's motto is "If not now, when?" which I think is a great line to live by. Are you going to update some of your fics soon? I miss Mith especially! Have I somehow managed to miss an update? Take care and speak soon!
Date: May 15 2009 09:28 am [Report This]
Title: Time Flies Reviewer: Anwyn Signed
This chapter was gut wrenching in its honesty. What really leapt out at me was the description of the plump girl with the dark hair crying at one moment when it was right to do so and then playing silly games with her guy the next.

I have seen this many times before where someone cries and cries when it is 'right' to do so and then the next moment they are fine again and I can't help but feel they are doing it for show though grief also hits people at different times and it is the smaller things that leap at you and make you want to break down.

Another wonderful chapter, I must say I am looking foward to returning to Middle Earth in this story again but it is just as important for the reader to see how Anna is holding up.

Author's Response: When I had the original idea, this was going to be completely set in Middle-earth bar the opening two chapters, but I got attached to Anna as a character and didn't just want to leave her hanging there in her grief! It was only supposed to be short, as well - three or four chapters maximum! So much for that... :-) thank you so much for reviewing, we will be back to Middle-earth in the next chapter!
Date: May 14 2009 07:00 pm [Report This]
Title: Time Flies Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
I liked the scene-by-scene look of Anna's life. It was seamlessly put together, not at all jumpy. Her feelings are still so believable, I can't get over being impressed. :)
Oh, it's beautiful that she's dreaming of Izzy, yet she has no idea.
Um, literary reference... Harry Potter? Ok, I give up! (Do I still get to know the answer? *begs*)

Author's Response: It's slightly obscure, I'll message it to you! Thank you so much for reading and for your lovely comments, I'm glad you're still enjoying it :-)
Date: May 14 2009 05:17 pm [Report This]
Title: Time Flies Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
This was grueling - and very true to life. I think you caught the emotions perfectly. The dreams she is beginning to have provided the doorway into Middle-earth and a mystery and spark just where it was needed. No, I am not saying it was too melancholy, it was perfect, so many fanfic stories deal easily with subjects like death and the process of grief, which makes them shallow. The grieving process really is like slogging through a swamp, and you can't speed it, or make it better whatever you do (or what other people do) You have shown that with complete authenticity.

Although Anna does not know what the dreams mean, it made me feel in some way, more hopeful for her, and I hope this proves to be the case, in some way or another.

Super, gritty and realistic chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so pleased you think I caught the emotions; I did wonder as I was re-reading if it wasn't getting too bogged down in the mundane aspects of the grieving process, but I didn't want to compromise and rush through. "Slogging through a swamp" - that's a perfect way to put it. It will get happier - I know I keep saying that, but it will, honestly!!
Date: May 14 2009 02:02 pm [Report This]
Title: Interlude Reviewer: Pink Siamese Signed
I patiently await the revelation. :)

Author's Response: Teehee :) won't be long! Thank you for R&Ring.
Date: May 12 2009 08:56 pm [Report This]
Title: Interlude Reviewer: callerofcrows Signed
OoOh! Intruiging! I'm so curious now, I wonder what/who Derry is? Please write more!

Author's Response: The next chapter is almost done and needs a little tweaking; it shouldn't be long before it's posted. Thank you for the review!!
Date: May 12 2009 11:58 am [Report This]
Title: Interlude Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
And someone emailed me to ask if he'd died; the answer to that is no, but maybe I haven't made it clear enough. What do you think?

I didn't think he had died in the chapter, but *gone back under* - and it refers to his dreams, so I did not think he was dying in the hospital - I wondered if he had died in Middle-earth and was in hospital *now*. I thought it was clear :)

Author's Response: OK, brilliant, thank you! Things will be explained in subsequent chapters anyway, but I didn't want people thinking he was dead.
Date: May 12 2009 11:52 am [Report This]
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