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Title: Night Time in the Stables Reviewer: tinara Signed
Mh, so Beomia dreams as well - until she understands what all this means, it must be really hard to see Orwin again. Just after she decided to begin life anew, she is reminded of him every night - not very fair.
But I agree with Annis - one cannot hope to really understand humans :-)

Author's Response: "One cannot hope to really understand humans", indeed :) as for Beomia, she hasn't completely realised yet that it's Orvyn, but she will. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :D
Date: Sep 21 2009 06:52 am [Report This]
Title: Night Time in the Stables Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
Both Annis and Beomia's POVs were interesting. Supposing she's just 'mad' might be an understatement! I can't fathom how I'd feel in her place with those dreams. Funny about the talking 'little box'. (Though like Beomia, I don't quite them either...) Most telling was her thought that she knew Derry's smile.
Thanks for the update! :)

Author's Response: And thank you for reading it and being kind enough to leave feedback! :) I had quite a time trying to work out how to describe our world in the way Beomia would see the end I settled for a couple of little details rather than going on for ages. This chapter was a lot longer in its draft form, but I think it's better this way!
Date: Sep 17 2009 10:36 am [Report This]
Title: Night Time in the Stables Reviewer: faramiriel Signed
That's an interesting twist, I totally did not expect that at all. Great idea! And I loved the bit from Annis' POV, that was just cute. :D

Author's Response: Spiced Wine said she didn't see it coming either...I'm actually surprised people hadn't guessed, I foreshadowed it a couple of chapters ago, but never mind! Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Date: Sep 17 2009 08:44 am [Report This]
Title: Night Time in the Stables Reviewer: Spiced Wine Signed
Ojhhh! Beomia has been having dreams! Well wow - I did not see that coming, although it does make sense!

Behold - the mystery - it deepens!

Well, if this is procrastination, please keep going! :D

Author's Response: I don't think I can get away with much more procrastination today lol I have lots more chapters sitting handwritten in various notebooks, but I have to leave the computer alone at some point and get on with useful things...anyway, thank you for reading and reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Date: Sep 17 2009 04:52 am [Report This]
Title: Brighter Shade Reviewer: faramiriel Signed
Wow - this story is awesome! It's really well written too! I can't wait for the next chapter!


Author's Response: Thank you faramiriel - I'm glad you're enjoying it! Next chapter shouldn't be too long, so stay tuned :p
Date: Sep 12 2009 10:13 am [Report This]
Title: Prologue Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
Sorry Narya! Looks like the site ate my review... there was more to it than that, really!

I mean that their comparing 'past-life' notes sounds like fun! ^^

I was again impressed by the emotional and descriptional depth here. Of course Anna would want to have this seperate world with Derry, where Izzy is not dead. But I'm glad she finally told him. Now I think she can start to heal.

Loved this line: "Trees with emerald leaves smiled down at them and sighed in gratitude at the slightest kiss of the wind; the underfoot crunch of gravel on the paths sounded cheerful and friendly; even the sky looked different."

Lovely that Derry and Anna's relationship is moving forward. The dream journal set suspense too... could Beomia be married now???
Date: Sep 10 2009 05:17 pm [Report This]
Title: Brighter Shade Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
Comparing their second life notes?

Author's Response: Sorry Kitt, maybe I'm being dense because it's kind of late here...but what do you mean!?
Date: Sep 10 2009 01:50 pm [Report This]
Title: Brighter Shade Reviewer: tinara Signed
A great chapter - and really a good place for a break, if there has to be one.
I liked the way you used Anna's journal to keep track of Beomia (in a way at least). And always Annis is present - it's nice to see Anna thinks it strange. I'm sure it's a bit difficult for Derry - he had some dreams and when he realizes this is "real" he cannot "visit" again.
I like the beginning relationship, you described very well, how much is conveyed by gestures, glances and feelings without any words.
Until you have time to continue,

Author's Response: Hi Tinara! Thank you for reading and reviewing, as usual; I'm pleased you liked it. More lights will start flicking on in people's heads when the story returns - there'll be tears and drama before it's all over, and I may get slated for one of the decisions I've made, but we'll cross that bridge when we come to it. Many thanks once again; it shouldn't be too long before I can post more.
Date: Sep 10 2009 01:01 pm [Report This]
Title: Brighter Shade Reviewer: Spiced Wine Signed
Wonderful chapter! ~ I love the interaction between Anna and Derry here, it's so true to life. They are not your average *couple* that's for sure, and you did not make it a 'Love-at-first-sight' relationship. It's got thorns and difficulties.

I am glad she did tell him about Izzy, despite the pain. I think she needed to do that.
That was really well-written!

Sorry it is on hiatus for a while, but it's a brilliant idea to write gift-fics; they are the best presents I've ever had.

Author's Response: I've never actually given stories as presents before - I've written them for people if they've asked for them, but not for a birthday or Christmas or anything. I'm glad you liked the chapter; no, they aren't your average lovey-dovey couple, but then again how could they be, after what they've been through? Thanks for reading and leaving feedback; I'll post more ASAP.
Date: Sep 10 2009 05:52 am [Report This]
Title: A Visitor Reviewer: Spiced Wine Signed
Could I truly spend the rest of my life with a man who looks like an egg?

I actually don't mind bald men, but I completely understand Beomia's 'this is not going to work.'

I was going to say 'It could be worse. It could be raining.'

But it is. O_o.

Great atmosphere of gloom all through this chapter.

Author's Response: Hehe it's nothing personal against bald men, but she's only young, after all! Thanks for reading and reviewing, glad you still like it :-)
Date: Sep 08 2009 02:36 am [Report This]
Title: A Visitor Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
Oo, dreams "very strange indeed"! Cool.
I feel sorry for Beomia... her focus on his egg head and creaking feet isn't a great start. I'm curious about Aiken's character, really. With this being through Beomia's eyes, we don't see quite what the 'good' in him is.
I liked the ending. Moody. ^^

Author's Response: Thank you Kitt; you'll get to know Aiken a little better in time, but you aren't the only one who's said they're curious! Thanks for reading and reviewing, as always :-)
Date: Sep 07 2009 07:40 pm [Report This]
Title: A Visitor Reviewer: callerofcrows Signed
Wonderful imagery in this chapter, absolutely great. I could visualize the scenes in my head as if I was watching a movie. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you! :-D it shouldn't be too long.
Date: Sep 07 2009 06:12 pm [Report This]
Title: "I'll be a spinster first!" Reviewer: callerofcrows Signed

"...there isn’t a woman in Edoras who believes your maidenhead to be intact, and trust me when I say that there aren’t many men will take soiled goods.”

Ouuch. Great chapter, I was outraged along with Beomia.

Author's Response: Yes, Eadwyn isn't the most sensitive of characters :p thanks for the review!
Date: Sep 07 2009 06:06 pm [Report This]
Title: Dinner and a Discovery Reviewer: callerofcrows Signed
Have me hooked once again! Must keep reading!

Author's Response: Oh, thanks!! :D hope you like it!
Date: Sep 07 2009 06:02 pm [Report This]
Title: The New Boy Reviewer: callerofcrows Signed

OoOoh, cute new boy! Gotta love it when that happens!

Sorry that I haven't reviewed this story very often; I just get so engrossed in the plot and keep reading and reading and get the idea. It's really wonderful and I love the depth that you keep adding to Anna. You switch really well between ME and Earth Earth (EE?) and that's something that's not easy to do at all! Great job, as usual :-)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review :-) don't worry about not leaving feedback, I know how hectic life can get, and I know you've been struggling for screen time. I'm just glad you're still enjoying it! I like EE, might have to adopt that :-) thanks again!!
Date: Sep 07 2009 05:58 pm [Report This]
Title: A Visitor Reviewer: tinara Signed
Yeah, well - if the ONLY thing you can say about Aiken is, that he's kind ... Honestly, I'm curious where this is leading - perhaps Aiken's not the ideal choice for Beomia, I will have to resign myself to patience and see how everything is developing.
But up to now I'm REALLY curious about Annis - does she remember who she was? Does she dream as well?
Please update soon!

Author's Response: Argh, I don't want to give too much away about Annis either...but I feel really bad just saying "wait and see"! There'll be more of Aiken and Beomia, and more about Annis, I can promise that much. Thanks for reviewing :-)
Date: Sep 07 2009 03:26 pm [Report This]
Title: A Visitor Reviewer: Pink Siamese Signed
I went through and read other reviews of this chapter and the last chapter, and I'm so relieved to see that I'm not the only one wondering about Aiken. I'm not sure it's intended on your part, but I'm feeling kind of sympathetic toward him...wondering how he feels about Beomia, if he loves her or is attracted to her at all. His taciturn manner intrigues me, making me wonder what's going on in his head. Of course, this likely has more to do with me than with anything else; I'm intrigued by quiet men, and I'm old enough to find the right kind of fortyish balding man sexy. ;-)

Author's Response: Haha!! Actually, it wasn't my intention to have readers feeling sympathy for Aiken - yet. He comes more into his own further in, and it is made clear how he feels about Beomia. I'm glad I've got you wondering, though! Thank you so much for keeping with the story and leaving feedback :-)
Date: Sep 07 2009 02:42 pm [Report This]
Title: The Truth Reviewer: tinara Signed
Concerning Aiken's appearance - I don't feel like something is missing, it was just a thought I had and something I'm curious about - but I will wait patiently till you think it's possible to put in the story. As you focus mainly on Beomia it's not necessary, as Aiken's appearance will only give the reader another opinion, but to understand and get to know Beomia this is not needed. It will be interesting, though, to see if her different point of view now after her talk with Eothain will influence her opinion on Aiken (I have a feeling it might make a difference).

Author's Response: "I have a feeling it might make a difference"...ah well, you'll just have to keep reading ;-) the next update shouldn't be too long. Thank you for your continued patience and support!!
Date: Sep 06 2009 08:03 am [Report This]
Title: The Truth Reviewer: Spiced Wine Signed
Lovely absorption into Rohan; you make it feel incredibly real.
I am not sure if Aiken's POV prior to this would make a difference ~ maybe something from his POV after? I don't know, I like to head hop at different times and eventually find out what all the main protagonists think, so it would depend on whether Aiken is going to be one, or not.

Author's Response: I wasn't planning on actually getting inside Aiken's head - not the way I do with Bee and Wulf and Anna and Derry. What I am going to do is bring him in as a kind of "secondary" character, i.e. we meet him, but only through the eyes of the protaganists. A bit like Eothain and his mother - we meet them, but don't experience their thoughts and feelings. Thanks for reviewing, as always :-D
Date: Sep 06 2009 01:01 am [Report This]
Title: The Truth Reviewer: tinara Signed
Interesting development. I like your thoughts on duty and choice. At the moment I'm not really feeling like I#m able to judge the situation. Aiken has only been introduced out of Beomia's point of view. Perhaps there are sides to him, she can learn to like? Even make friends with him?
And just what does Annis understand (or think about her own situation)?
Please update soon,

Author's Response: "At the moment I'm not really feeling like I#m able to judge the situation. Aiken has only been introduced out of Beomia's point of view"...actually, it's interesting you should say that. I had a draft chapter written out in which the reader was introduced to Aiken (it took place prior to this sequence of events), but it didn't really add much to the plot and it felt flat and wooden so I took it out. He appears again later, but I did wonder when I typed this up and posted it whether readers would resent not having "met" Aiken for themselves. Would you mind giving me your honest opinion - do you think it would add to the story if Aiken appeared earlier? Thanks, as ever, for the feedback :-)
Date: Sep 05 2009 02:32 pm [Report This]
Title: The Truth Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
I *loved* Eothain's mother. Sharp and understanding - she was perfect for Beomia. I'm glad too to know the truth about Orvyn. That's a an understandable conflict - how could she help it? - should he have died for those children and left her? It's still nice to know he died with honor.
I also liked your Eothain. 'Too big for his stirrups' - ha!
Aw, that's sweet of Wulf. :) First swearing he won't let Aiken marry her and second offering to give her Annis.
I wonder how much Annis knows. Does she see her sister in Bee?
I'm in suspense! Will she really marry Aiken...?

Author's Response: Eothain's mother appeared on the page completely of her own did Beomia, as a matter of fact. Can you believe that this was supposed to be a three-part ficlet about a boy and his horse!? It just took off in its own direction! Yes, I thought she (and the readers) deserved the truth about Orvyn. Well, actually, the reader knowing what he did is kind of necessary...but I don't want to give too much away ;)
Date: Sep 04 2009 06:27 pm [Report This]
Title: "I'll be a spinster first!" Reviewer: tinara Signed
Just what is this woman thinking! Surely things can't be that bad for Beomia and her family that her mother had to catch the first suitor? I hope she comes to her senses - remembering what it was at this age - obviously not, otherwise she wouldn't talk like this.
Please update soon, I'm looking forward to how Anna and Derry will solve this mystery!

Author's Response: Well, it's a fairly primitive's not so long ago even in our world that sex before marriage was heavily frowned upon! The next chapter (which I plan to post tomorrow or the day after) is staying in Rohan, but we will be moving back to Derry and Anna soon. Thanks, as always, for reading and reviewing :-)
Date: Aug 30 2009 01:17 pm [Report This]
Title: "I'll be a spinster first!" Reviewer: Spiced Wine Signed
This was a great, and highly believable conversation between Anna and Derry, and well worth waiting for, although their confusion is no less, in fact it is probably doubled! But at least they can talk and bounce ideas off one another.

Lovely transition to Rohan, and a great deal of tension within the family.
Oh dear, poor Beomia, in the marriage mart for a much older man because gossip has damaged her reputation. Ot did almost seem, that in a society where women were less emancipated than now, some of Anna was coming through Beomia in her last outburst!

Thank-you for the update. :)

Author's Response: Thank you!! :-D yes, they're going to be comparing notes and seeing how their stories/memories/dreams fit together. And Anna and Beomia are, in some ways, very similar...Beomia is perhaps more openly emotional, but they share quite a few character traits, as we shall see later ;-)
Date: Aug 28 2009 02:34 pm [Report This]
Title: "I'll be a spinster first!" Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed
I am glad to see an update! How understandable was Derry’s anger here. Seriously, Anna’s story would have sounded insane, even mocking. But at least they still remained friends at the end. Now what can they do… ah, nothing, I guess. This is a strange thing they share.

Poor Beomia. :( So the whole town think she’s disgraced? Can she ever prove her honor now, I wonder. That’s not a happy situation: marry an old bald man or be a spinster. I can see where her mother is coming from, though – it’s hard to find a good man.

Ah, the little foal is unlocking the stable! With her intelligence, who knows what else she’ll get into... Can’t wait to find out! ^_^

Author's Response: Hey Kitt! Thanks for the review :-) yeah, I did think it would be ridiculous to expect Derry to believe Anna, but like you say, at least they're still friends! And as for Beomia, her honour and the'll just have to keep reading :p
Date: Aug 28 2009 07:32 am [Report This]
Title: Dinner and a Discovery Reviewer: tinara Signed
I#m really drawn into it - and then this! Please update soon, I would like to know, how these two sort everything out.

Author's Response: I'll do my best to update soon! I'm so glad you're enjoying it; it's great to have a new reader :-) thanks for the review.
Date: Jul 01 2009 09:22 am [Report This]
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