I mean that their comparing 'past-life' notes sounds like fun! ^^
I was again impressed by the emotional and descriptional depth here. Of course Anna would want to have this seperate world with Derry, where Izzy is not dead. But I'm glad she finally told him. Now I think she can start to heal.
Loved this line: "Trees with emerald leaves smiled down at them and sighed in gratitude at the slightest kiss of the wind; the underfoot crunch of gravel on the paths sounded cheerful and friendly; even the sky looked different."
Lovely that Derry and Anna's relationship is moving forward. The dream journal set suspense too... could Beomia be married now???
Author's Response: Sorry Kitt, maybe I'm being dense because it's kind of late here...but what do you mean!?
I liked the way you used Anna's journal to keep track of Beomia (in a way at least). And always Annis is present - it's nice to see Anna thinks it strange. I'm sure it's a bit difficult for Derry - he had some dreams and when he realizes this is "real" he cannot "visit" again.
I like the beginning relationship, you described very well, how much is conveyed by gestures, glances and feelings without any words.
Until you have time to continue,
Author's Response: Hi Tinara! Thank you for reading and reviewing, as usual; I'm pleased you liked it. More lights will start flicking on in people's heads when the story returns - there'll be tears and drama before it's all over, and I may get slated for one of the decisions I've made, but we'll cross that bridge when we come to it. Many thanks once again; it shouldn't be too long before I can post more.
I am glad she did tell him about Izzy, despite the pain. I think she needed to do that.
That was really well-written!
Sorry it is on hiatus for a while, but it's a brilliant idea to write gift-fics; they are the best presents I've ever had.
Author's Response: I've never actually given stories as presents before - I've written them for people if they've asked for them, but not for a birthday or Christmas or anything. I'm glad you liked the chapter; no, they aren't your average lovey-dovey couple, but then again how could they be, after what they've been through? Thanks for reading and leaving feedback; I'll post more ASAP.
Could I truly spend the rest of my life with a man who looks like an egg?
I actually don't mind bald men, but I completely understand Beomia's 'this is not going to work.'
I was going to say 'It could be worse. It could be raining.'
But it is. O_o.
Great atmosphere of gloom all through this chapter.
Author's Response: Hehe it's nothing personal against bald men, but she's only young, after all! Thanks for reading and reviewing, glad you still like it :-)
I feel sorry for Beomia... her focus on his egg head and creaking feet isn't a great start. I'm curious about Aiken's character, really. With this being through Beomia's eyes, we don't see quite what the 'good' in him is.
I liked the ending. Moody. ^^
Author's Response: Thank you Kitt; you'll get to know Aiken a little better in time, but you aren't the only one who's said they're curious! Thanks for reading and reviewing, as always :-)
Author's Response: Thank you! :-D it shouldn't be too long.
"...there isn’t a woman in Edoras who believes your maidenhead to be intact, and trust me when I say that there aren’t many men will take soiled goods.”
Ouuch. Great chapter, I was outraged along with Beomia.
Author's Response: Yes, Eadwyn isn't the most sensitive of characters :p thanks for the review!
Author's Response: Oh, thanks!! :D hope you like it!
OoOoh, cute new boy! Gotta love it when that happens!
Sorry that I haven't reviewed this story very often; I just get so engrossed in the plot and keep reading and reading and reading...you get the idea. It's really wonderful and I love the depth that you keep adding to Anna. You switch really well between ME and Earth Earth (EE?) and that's something that's not easy to do at all! Great job, as usual :-)
Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review :-) don't worry about not leaving feedback, I know how hectic life can get, and I know you've been struggling for screen time. I'm just glad you're still enjoying it! I like EE, might have to adopt that :-) thanks again!!
But up to now I'm REALLY curious about Annis - does she remember who she was? Does she dream as well?
Please update soon!
Author's Response: Argh, I don't want to give too much away about Annis either...but I feel really bad just saying "wait and see"! There'll be more of Aiken and Beomia, and more about Annis, I can promise that much. Thanks for reviewing :-)
Author's Response: Haha!! Actually, it wasn't my intention to have readers feeling sympathy for Aiken - yet. He comes more into his own further in, and it is made clear how he feels about Beomia. I'm glad I've got you wondering, though! Thank you so much for keeping with the story and leaving feedback :-)
Author's Response: "I have a feeling it might make a difference"...ah well, you'll just have to keep reading ;-) the next update shouldn't be too long. Thank you for your continued patience and support!!
I am not sure if Aiken's POV prior to this would make a difference ~ maybe something from his POV after? I don't know, I like to head hop at different times and eventually find out what all the main protagonists think, so it would depend on whether Aiken is going to be one, or not.
Author's Response: I wasn't planning on actually getting inside Aiken's head - not the way I do with Bee and Wulf and Anna and Derry. What I am going to do is bring him in as a kind of "secondary" character, i.e. we meet him, but only through the eyes of the protaganists. A bit like Eothain and his mother - we meet them, but don't experience their thoughts and feelings. Thanks for reviewing, as always :-D
And just what does Annis understand (or think about her own situation)?
Please update soon,
Author's Response: "At the moment I'm not really feeling like I#m able to judge the situation. Aiken has only been introduced out of Beomia's point of view"...actually, it's interesting you should say that. I had a draft chapter written out in which the reader was introduced to Aiken (it took place prior to this sequence of events), but it didn't really add much to the plot and it felt flat and wooden so I took it out. He appears again later, but I did wonder when I typed this up and posted it whether readers would resent not having "met" Aiken for themselves. Would you mind giving me your honest opinion - do you think it would add to the story if Aiken appeared earlier? Thanks, as ever, for the feedback :-)
I also liked your Eothain. 'Too big for his stirrups' - ha!
Aw, that's sweet of Wulf. :) First swearing he won't let Aiken marry her and second offering to give her Annis.
I wonder how much Annis knows. Does she see her sister in Bee?
I'm in suspense! Will she really marry Aiken...?
Author's Response: Eothain's mother appeared on the page completely of her own accord...as did Beomia, as a matter of fact. Can you believe that this was supposed to be a three-part ficlet about a boy and his horse!? It just took off in its own direction! Yes, I thought she (and the readers) deserved the truth about Orvyn. Well, actually, the reader knowing what he did is kind of necessary...but I don't want to give too much away ;)
Please update soon, I'm looking forward to how Anna and Derry will solve this mystery!
Author's Response: Well, it's a fairly primitive culture...it's not so long ago even in our world that sex before marriage was heavily frowned upon! The next chapter (which I plan to post tomorrow or the day after) is staying in Rohan, but we will be moving back to Derry and Anna soon. Thanks, as always, for reading and reviewing :-)
Lovely transition to Rohan, and a great deal of tension within the family.
Oh dear, poor Beomia, in the marriage mart for a much older man because gossip has damaged her reputation. Ot did almost seem, that in a society where women were less emancipated than now, some of Anna was coming through Beomia in her last outburst!
Thank-you for the update. :)
Author's Response: Thank you!! :-D yes, they're going to be comparing notes and seeing how their stories/memories/dreams fit together. And Anna and Beomia are, in some ways, very similar...Beomia is perhaps more openly emotional, but they share quite a few character traits, as we shall see later ;-)
Poor Beomia. :( So the whole town think she’s disgraced? Can she ever prove her honor now, I wonder. That’s not a happy situation: marry an old bald man or be a spinster. I can see where her mother is coming from, though – it’s hard to find a good man.
Ah, the little foal is unlocking the stable! With her intelligence, who knows what else she’ll get into... Can’t wait to find out! ^_^
Author's Response: Hey Kitt! Thanks for the review :-) yeah, I did think it would be ridiculous to expect Derry to believe Anna, but like you say, at least they're still friends! And as for Beomia, her honour and the foal...you'll just have to keep reading :p
Author's Response: I'll do my best to update soon! I'm so glad you're enjoying it; it's great to have a new reader :-) thanks for the review.
Author's Response: I could really just hijack most of Spiced Wine's review...woot! Thank you so much *glows* when I get a nice review from you, SW or both, it's like a teacher putting a gold star on my work - makes my day! Like I was saying to Kitt, I have to pace myself in terms of how quickly I reveal the info - now I know where I'm going (and it's not where I thought I was going originally, but then again it never is) I can't wait to share it with the readers. Glad you enjoyed the dialogue, too; I enjoyed writing it. Thank you for reading and reviewing, as ever!
Oh wow, you had to leave it at this cliffy! O_o Damn!
Author's Response: Yay, thank you!!! Yeah, there had to be a cliffhanger...at the rate I'm updating, I'd lose my readers if I didn't give them something to come back for! XD Yes, Anna's definitely a thoughtful, sensitive type. *SPOILER* In later chapters, we'll see how she spent a lot of her childhood in her sister's shadow - albeit unwillingly - which has had a huge influence on how she interacts with her peers now. She's used to having to be quiet and listen.
Derry's becoming far more complex than I would have guessed - ya know, beyond the piercing. ;) When Anna is talking with him, I feel very much in her head. Their evolution from shyness to ease was believable.
Author's Response: Yep, he's Orvyn...kind of... :p I'm glad you're still enjoying it, that you can identify with the characters and that you find it interesting. I have to try and keep myself from info-dumping; I have the whole plot pretty much settled (and a lot of it already written out longhand) but now I know where I'm going I kind of want to write it all in at once! I'm doing my best to take things at a steady pace and let the readers digest things, so let me know if I start moving too fast. Thanks for the review! :-D
Author's Response: Hi Ndil! Sorry I didn't get back to you earlier, I'm usually much quicker than this *slaps wrists* thank you for the compliments...and, by way of apology, the next chapter is now up ;-) so feel free to read on!