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Reviewer: VeronicaD13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/08/09 - 12:34 am Title: Chapter 18
Date: 03/08/09 - 12:34 am Title: Chapter 18
Great if sad update! I can't wait to see what's next! I wonder if he will tell her and what her reaction will be...
More soon please!
Author's Response: A little sad, I know. I guess I just can't turn mortal-elf love into one big joke, can I? Will he tell her? Who knows? Well, maybe I should... ;) Stay tuned! and thank you for your review!
Reviewer: Scarlet10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 31/07/09 - 11:03 am Title: Chapter 18
Date: 31/07/09 - 11:03 am Title: Chapter 18
Welcome back. And, that was too short...
Isn't all good things end too fast?
Thank you for this lovely chapter
Author's Response: Time flies, time flies; no need to tell me about it. That's just what life is like in the summer months, right? You're very welcome. Thank you again for another review!
Reviewer: Variscodel Signed [Report This]
Date: 31/07/09 - 08:06 am Title: Chapter 18
Date: 31/07/09 - 08:06 am Title: Chapter 18
I loved this chapter. It was surely worth the long wait. I hope you'll post more stories. You're a great writer!
Author's Response: I am glad it was worth it. I am really busy, but every second I got to spare I spend on this story. I do have some plot ideas for another Iris story messing with my brain, but for now I try to ignore that. First I've got to focus on the next chapter...
Reviewer: Elanor Fay Signed [Report This]
Date: 30/07/09 - 09:28 pm Title: Chapter 18
Date: 30/07/09 - 09:28 pm Title: Chapter 18
Yay! You updated! *grins* You know I'm usually not one for romances, but I can't help but enjoying Iris and Legolas's relationship. It evolved natrually and isn't your typical Mary Sue+Leggy story.
And I have a guess as to what the regrets are, I guessed it a bit early on. Does it have someething to do with chapter 5?
Author's Response: Thanks! It definitely is a compliment when those that don't like the genre can stil enjoy the story. Oh, and I'd say: keep guessing. I am not going to say anything, not until the very last chapter.... *evil grin*
Reviewer: Variscodel Signed [Report This]
Date: 30/07/09 - 05:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Date: 30/07/09 - 05:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Please, don't forget about your story. It's too great to give it up.
Author's Response: I don't forget about this story, don't worry. Thanks for reviewing though because it's always nice to know you haven't forgotten either. The enxt chapter is up. It is not as long as I hoped it to be, but more is coming soon. Sailing turned out to be great, but not completely like I expected. I haven't read a single book, nor written anything at all. Still I took time to think about the ending and decided to change things a bit. Keep reading, I'll keep posting!
Reviewer: ArticFox Signed [Report This]
Date: 14/07/09 - 12:27 am Title: Chapter 1
Date: 14/07/09 - 12:27 am Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely love this! I just sat down and read all 17 chapters. I love how Iris is your typical Mary Sue, and the realationship you're building between Legolas and her is great. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks! That is such a compliment that you read it all at once. The next chapter is up, and more is coming soon...
Reviewer: VeronicaD13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/07/09 - 06:24 am Title: Chapter 17
Date: 12/07/09 - 06:24 am Title: Chapter 17
This is a great story! Don't quite understand what the regrets are yet, but I guess that's coming in the future. Same with the delayed gift.
Love the interactions that Iris has with the fellowship. And her ever-changing relationship with Legolas is pretty great too. Can't wait to see where that actually winds up going.
More soon please!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! That really gets my spirits up. This chapter should make the gift bit clear, the regrets are still to be explained. There is more coming soon...
Reviewer: Elanor Fay Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/07/09 - 12:17 am Title: Chapter 1
Date: 08/07/09 - 12:17 am Title: Chapter 1
Originally I had thought I was only going to read a bit of your story, but I got sucked into it! I spent most of my morning reading it! It's very well-written and I can't wait to read more. I love your realism and your style of writing. It's refreshing and unique. Keep up the good work!
-Fay
Author's Response: Thank you! Such a kind review makes my dday. I will update, but it will take at least two weeks as I will be sailing in Greece without internet access. Thank you! And stay tuned ;)
Reviewer: Scarlet10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/07/09 - 02:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
Date: 07/07/09 - 02:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
"I also spend quite some time trying to expand the light conversation between Legolas and Iris, but I can't find the right tone anymore."
May I offer some tips out of my own conversation with Legolas? (though he never got to answer them, we were disturbed by some horrific orcs...), so here it goes:
In regard to Elves ears, there's something I was wondering, Are they able to move "on hinge" (you know, like cats ears), or are they "fixed" like ours but simply tipped instead of rounded at the top?
As for that "alabaster" skin of theirs (see numerous stories), is it sensitive to sun burns? I mean the white-skin among us get to either burn, or else be enslaved to lotions, how is it that their warriors spend all this time outdoors, and get not even a freckle? not to mention dry wrinkled skin?
Another bothering issue, regarding to blond elves (sorry, fair haired): how come in some cases we hear that one of the parents was with dark hair (specifically Legolas mom - again, see numerous stories) and still the child turns out blond?
With us, mortals, the child will always take after the darker haired parent.
I think I have some more simpleton's questions, but let him address these first.. If he (or you) ever talks back to me :-)
Author's Response: Sorry to hear you got disturbed by Orcs, they just don't seem to be very nice. I did try something concerning the pointed ears, and the pale skin, but the conversation kept coming out unnatural. I promise I'll keep trying. However I'll be off soon for a sailing holiday in Greece. There will be time to write, I assume, but no internet acces. Sorry to keep you waiting! Thanks for your review
Reviewer: Scarlet10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/07/09 - 02:31 pm Title: Chapter 17
Date: 07/07/09 - 02:31 pm Title: Chapter 17
You promised it won't get to be depressing at the end, right?
Her questions and thoughts makes me very suspicious....
He's not going to forsake his immortality and kin, right?
Author's Response: lol. Good to hear your drawn in. It would be a waste to tell you what is going to happen. Just, don't worry too much :P
Reviewer: Variscodel Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/07/09 - 06:59 am Title: Chapter 16
Date: 07/07/09 - 06:59 am Title: Chapter 16
Don't break my heart, Ndil! Keep updating, please! Love you!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! No heart break has been intended! I am in Austria right now, celebrating my summer break. I try to find time to update, but there is so much to do. I also spend quite some time trying to expand the light conversation between Legolas and Iris, but I can't find the right tone anymore. I put up a new chapter. It's short, but things are drawing to an end... Thanks!!!
Reviewer: Scarlet10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/07/09 - 03:03 pm Title: Chapter 16
Date: 02/07/09 - 03:03 pm Title: Chapter 16
"And obviously I cannot refuse to obey a plea from a reviewer"
I beg to differ...
I asked to hear the answers to the on going questionnaire...
Iris questioned Legolas for two more hours, of which we did not get a single detail... I am sure there were quite some juicy items there.... You owe us :-)
And as for them becoming an item, well, as long as Either Legolas gets to sail west when Iris's time is up, or the story ends with "and they lived happily ever after", I am pleased. You see, deep down, very hidden from all eyes, I am quite the mushy type... :-)
Thanks you for an enjoyable story.
Author's Response: I owe you an apology then, although I honestly misunderstood the question :P Maye I will figure out what more has been said on that night, maybe not. If I do I'll let you know.
And concerning the happy ending.... I guess I don't differ from you on that... So don't worry about it, I won't try to turn this into something depressing or deep. That would just be, well, depressing... wouldn't it?
Reviewer: Scarlet10 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/07/09 - 07:05 am Title: Chapter 15
Date: 02/07/09 - 07:05 am Title: Chapter 15
Nice :-P
Are they going to end up "an item"?
I'll hate to see this turning into your typical "Mary-Sue", although the humor here is quite catching.
I am left smiling broadly at this coversation.
Please let be a bit longer, and please, please, let us hear it?
Author's Response: Well, I guess it's never been real hard to guess where this story could be going. And yes, that is where it is going. I hope the coming chapters won't be too much of a dissapointment. And obvioulsy I cannot refuse to obey a plea from a reviewer, so the next chapter had just been posted! Thanks a lot for reviewing, it really is appreciated!
Reviewer: Narya Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/07/09 - 09:03 pm Title: Chapter 15
Date: 01/07/09 - 09:03 pm Title: Chapter 15
“ Do Elves ever have a midlife-crisis?”
LOL!
Sorry for the lack of reviews, Ndil; I haven't abandoned the story, I'm still following. I've just had a busy period.
This is still a fresh and fun take on the standard girl-from-our-time-goes-to-ME plot; your OFC is likeable and interesting, and her relationships with the Fellowship are touching and realistic. I also like how you have her making comparisons to modern objects and technology, e.g. the palantir to Skype. An all-around good job.
Author's Response: Thank you again! I'm glad you found this bit funny, it was supposed to be :P. I'm also glad your still following! And the plot of this story is a 100% standard girl from our time goed to ME plot. I just try to use Iris to make up for that. Thanx!
Reviewer: Variscodel Signed [Report This]
Date: 30/06/09 - 11:55 am Title: Chapter 14
Date: 30/06/09 - 11:55 am Title: Chapter 14
Please update!!! I love your story. PLEASE DO!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! Because you asked I will update as soon as possible. Probably tonight. You made my day!
Reviewer: Liliesshadow Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/06/09 - 08:40 pm Title: Chapter 12
Date: 02/06/09 - 08:40 pm Title: Chapter 12
do they have anesthesia?
Author's Response: Hi Liliesshadow, thanks for reading and reviewing!I don't quite understand the question. No anesthetics are used in this chapter. They only get mentioned because Iris had been given some back in her own world when she had her bike crash. I guess the Rohirrim may very well have given their patients something, like alcohol, to lessen the pain, but I chose to not let them in this situation. You'd need to big a stock for such an immense number of patients and there probably wouldn't be enough time. I hope this answers your question!
Reviewer: xFanarix Signed [Report This]
Date: 31/05/09 - 01:05 pm Title: Chapter 11
Date: 31/05/09 - 01:05 pm Title: Chapter 11
Don't worry, no-one will quit on you. It is possible to write of a girl-in-Middle-earth with a tragic past and have it work. You introduced it well, here. Iris has not forever angsted on about her being a fosterling, and is a pleasant character. And of course such tragic road accidents do happen. There is an accident blackspot not far from where I live which has claimed whole families or individuals each year.
This is still up to your usual standard. It is not the subject matter, but how it is written which is important.
Wel done. :)
Author's Response: Thanks again! You are the most loyal reviewer on this site! There is another update coming soon...
Reviewer: Narya Signed [Report This]
Date: 26/05/09 - 10:42 am Title: Chapter 1
Date: 26/05/09 - 10:42 am Title: Chapter 1
Hi Ndil!
Firstly, if you hadn't said anything, I wouldn't have realised that English isn't your second language :-)
so congratulations.
Secondly, I agree with xFanarix - I don't feel like this is "just another Tenth Walker". It's funny, for a start; far too many GIMEs just leap straight into the angst and romance. I have to say, falling into ME whilst dressed in ski attire isn't something I've come across before! ;-)
Well done. I'll keep reading.
Author's Response: Hi Narya, thanks for reading and reviewing. I hope you'll keep enjoying it. I guess the good thing about writing in a foreign language versus speaking that language is that at least no one notices the accent. So I just have to try to keep my grammar clean, and only microsoft knows how often I use my spelling checker :P. Don't ever hesitate to tell me if I messed up somewhere. Thanks!
Reviewer: xFanarix Signed [Report This]
Date: 23/05/09 - 07:40 pm Title: Chapter 8
Few people ever address hygiene issues. (And I lol'd about men not caring about hygiene! ) Once, when I had seen virtually the whole first page of FF.net filled with tenth Walker, I made a list of everything I would need to journey with the Fellowship. I would have needed at least two pack horses, and a supermarket/chemist every thirty miles.
Well done, keep going :)
Author's Response: Thank you for your continuing support. I hope the story won’t disappoint you in chapters to come. It is another tenth walker story and I don’t try to specifically avoid the plotlines so familiar to these kind of stories. I mean, if so many feel like writing a tenth walker, than why would no one want to read it? I just try to approach the topic realistically. And if Iris is just a normal 21st century girl, then she won’t fit in Middle Earth. She isn’t this perfectly beautiful girl that makes Legolas fall in love at first sight. She is a girl that misses the luxury of toilet paper. But if she did not have these hurdles to overcome, I wouldn’t consider it interesting to think about. Thanks again!
Date: 23/05/09 - 07:40 pm Title: Chapter 8
I'm still liking this. It might be *just another tenth Walker*, but it's not. There is a lot of thought and depth behind your writing and Iris' thoughts, and you put that across very well. It's also very readable.
Women were not made for things like this.
Few people ever address hygiene issues. (And I lol'd about men not caring about hygiene! ) Once, when I had seen virtually the whole first page of FF.net filled with tenth Walker, I made a list of everything I would need to journey with the Fellowship. I would have needed at least two pack horses, and a supermarket/chemist every thirty miles.
Well done, keep going :)
Author's Response: Thank you for your continuing support. I hope the story won’t disappoint you in chapters to come. It is another tenth walker story and I don’t try to specifically avoid the plotlines so familiar to these kind of stories. I mean, if so many feel like writing a tenth walker, than why would no one want to read it? I just try to approach the topic realistically. And if Iris is just a normal 21st century girl, then she won’t fit in Middle Earth. She isn’t this perfectly beautiful girl that makes Legolas fall in love at first sight. She is a girl that misses the luxury of toilet paper. But if she did not have these hurdles to overcome, I wouldn’t consider it interesting to think about. Thanks again!
Reviewer: xFanarix Signed [Report This]
Date: 29/04/09 - 06:54 am Title: Chapter 7
The one thing I would say, is there is a great deal of 'tell' rather than 'show' in this chapter regarding her birthday. Tolkien writes distant omniscient third person in the Silmarillion, and it works, and it's also okay, I feel, to switch from your character's viewpoint to omniscient, but your story definitely reads more interestingly when you 'show' through Iris than just 'tell' things that happen.
keep up the good work. :)
Author's Response: I am sorry for the slow reply to your review. I have been travelling a lot lately and haven't had access to the internet in ages. Sadly enough I haven't had much time to write either, but at least I am bubbling with new ideas now. You're right indeed: I changed the viewpoint a bit during her birthday. I never realized it though. I must have been in a different mood when I wrote that bit. Thanks for pointing that out to me. Maybe I'll go back to it and change it. For coming chapters I'll try to keep Iris' viewpoint as the point of view.
Date: 29/04/09 - 06:54 am Title: Chapter 7
I still think the way you write Iris within the Fellowship is charming and amusing.
When had she started to feel interested in a bearded dwarf that hid in a cloud of smoke?*Snort!* whatever it was Aragorn gave her, I'll have a pint!
The one thing I would say, is there is a great deal of 'tell' rather than 'show' in this chapter regarding her birthday. Tolkien writes distant omniscient third person in the Silmarillion, and it works, and it's also okay, I feel, to switch from your character's viewpoint to omniscient, but your story definitely reads more interestingly when you 'show' through Iris than just 'tell' things that happen.
keep up the good work. :)
Author's Response: I am sorry for the slow reply to your review. I have been travelling a lot lately and haven't had access to the internet in ages. Sadly enough I haven't had much time to write either, but at least I am bubbling with new ideas now. You're right indeed: I changed the viewpoint a bit during her birthday. I never realized it though. I must have been in a different mood when I wrote that bit. Thanks for pointing that out to me. Maybe I'll go back to it and change it. For coming chapters I'll try to keep Iris' viewpoint as the point of view.