This is heating up...poor Brandon, he's so conflicted and angst ridden at the moment, which is understandable. Nice writing.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad to know that I'm portraying his emotions accurately. Thank you for the review; I hope I continue to keep up to your standards!
:S Angst abounds! Brandon is being a bit of a jerk. Can't wait to see how he reacts to Fangorn and the return of Gandalf, though! ^_^ Huzzah! Write more soon! :D
Author's Response: Yes. He is being sort of jerkish. I will write more, you don't have to ask, silly! And I'm looking forward to the return of Gandalf too! :-D
An excellent start! All Brandon's feelings of self-loathing and grief are wonderfully written.
"Look then," he said, "upon those with which you will learn to live, Brandon of Rohan."
Brandon of Rohan...
And a terrific, anticipatory ending to the first chapter!
Thank you! You can ask Narya, I've been pretty pumped about writing all about Brandon in Rohan. It's an exciting prospect and I'm really looking forward to putting my ideas and story-lines to work!
I was worried that the first chapter wasn't too great...thanks for the reassurance. It really means a lot! Thank you for continuing to read the Walking the Line saga!
FIRST REVIEW!! HUZZAH!!! ^_^ Yes, it is angsty in the beginning, but I'm glad that Brandon gets less "Gah, I'm a murderer, traitor, blargh I need to die" as the chapter continues. He REALLY NEEDS a hug, like whoa. He'll explode from the bottled emotions... dammit. Can't hug fictional characters! *pouts* WRITE MORE SOON PLEASE! Bravo, little sister! ^_^
FIRST REVIEW! YES! Congratulations! I will possibly buy you ice cream then? Umm...yes. When I have money. Possibly. And sorry to disappoint, but he's going to be all blargh-y off and on cuz, you know, his surrogate brother died. It'll take A LOT more than four days to heal completely for that, especially since he thinks he's at fault. Poor guy.
And as far as hugging him goes, you might be able to in the near future. I'm trying to work out a sketch of what he looks like, as you know...you've seen the gigantic scribbles on my sketch-pad. Once I have a good, solid drawing you can hug it, if you feel the urge.
That's kinda creepy, actually...
Thanks for the review!