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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Skittlemeister Signed
Thank you very much for your opinions on my story, I am glad you liked it so far. I decided to make Faramir a bit grim just to set a tone, but I shall gradually make him more as he is in the book. I haven't read it in a long while, so I had forgotten, but thank you for the reminder.

I shall also attempt in some way to tone down the descriptive writing, but it is simply my way, so my dear apologies if it was distracting. I will try my best to lower the amount in a subtle way, but be sure to see it if you decide to keep reading!
Date: Oct 06 2009 05:11 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Elanor Fay Signed
I was surprised this story hadn't gotten a review yet. I'm guessing this is your first story, and it's pretty good.

I noticed you put this under 'book-verse' which is alright but the Faramir you portray here is more like the version from the movie. Faramir the way Tolkien wrote him, wouldn't act as selfish as he's portrayed in the movie. In this story he acts like the movie Faramir and it shows you are new to writing Tolkien, but that is completely fine. You are good at giving very beautiful descriptions, but as some constructive criticism I would suggest not adding so many descriptions as they can sometimes get in the way of the actions and events in the story.

You do have great potential and I can picture you going a long way. Keep writing and see where it takes you!

Good luck,

Date: Oct 05 2009 11:29 am [Report This]
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