Freaking loved it. Surpassed any and all expectations. Maglor??!!! Ah, love it!!!
And maybe a love interest for his son in the sequel????
Maglor, oh yes I love me some Feanorian lol! And we couldn't leave the poor elf on Middle Earth and let Erion and the twins have all the fun in Valinor! But, he does have some unresolved issues, and that's the understatement of the year.
A love interest for Erion? Of course darling :D We can't leave him all alone now can we... I wonder who it will be, so many possibility's lol!
Thanks for the review, I am ecstatic you liked it :D
I love this opening and the premise. It's very unique and I am thrilled to see you tackling a controversial subject matter concerning Tolkien.
Jaden's biography is superb. I empathised with the character straight away and felt drawn into her world by the conflicts she had faced. The political part of your writing and description of Kenya reminds me of Wilbur Smith's writing in some ways.
She remembered the first half of the book was a little dull,
LoL! I feel that way too.
Author's Response: Thank-you for taking the time to review Los Gloriol!
"Jaden's biography is superb."
I hope you will read more! It's almost done! I am planning on reading more of your work too, I loved 'A Reminder of You' and can't wait to read more :D If you're into First Age works I'd recommend reading "The Price of Duty" I am putting together a series with "The Price of Duty" "To be Black" and the future sequel "Shadow of the Past." "The Price of Duty" is all set in the First Age -maybe some Second later one- I am only working on ch 3 now :P
Thank-you again for the review! It's always amazing to hear someone likes my story's :D
This was beautiful. Thank you for writing it. :)
Author's Response: Thank you Olorime! Yes, the story's defiantly going in the sad direction, but not without a little glimmer of hope :D But, that's the reality of a mortal/immortal relationships. Pain mixed in with the joy in equal measure. I'll have the next chapter up soon :)
I really enjoyed this. :) I am glad you are writing a sequel. :D
This is very interesting in that it has been a personal journey rather than a love story, and mature in that sense. I loved how you wrote that Jaden felt there was a distance between herself and Erestor after they made love. This is so real, and people who know nothing about relationships may think it strange - you can be intimate, but not close. A child. I wonder about the child with his choices, and the sadness when Jaden dies - I am really looking forward to a sequel.
Author's Response: Thank-you for taking the time to review :D
I did envision it as more of a love story when I started writing it so many months ago. But then I imagined a much happier ending too :) Yet, as much as it's been a journey for Jaden, it's been one for me too while writing this story. The reality of a mortal/immortal relationship couldn't be scraped over in favor of a nice happy 'But look they had lots of years together!' ending.
It was a painful write (especially next chapter, which I've nearly finished) but I had to do it. There are too many OC's and elven relationships that end when they marry/get together, but no story ends like that. Which makes this more of a personal journey and not a romance as you said. The story doesn't end when Jaden/Erestor get together, but linger on exploring the consequences of their love.
Yes, I've grown quite fond of Erion (especially when writing the next chapter) and he begs for his story to be written. Though Erestor has unresolved issues to. I've had some ideas for the sequel, and more keep coming! We'll see what happeneds.Thanks again for the review.
Great chapter. Glad she is willing to consider his love. Hope but will she suffer from morning sickness. and thats something that Erestor could take with him to the undying lands to keep him from fading. Boy I love this story. Hope to read more soon.
I usually read this story on FF.Net something wrong with my computer it wont let me reveiw on that site. So I reveiw here update soon
Hopely Yours Ecan
Author's Response: Thanks for the review ecan! "Hope but will she suffer from morning sickness. and that's something that Erestor could take with him to the undying lands to keep him from fading." *grins* I was defiantly thinking the same ;) I am planning on an update soon, I've already started the next chapter! -Encairion
Nicely done! All this chapter dealt with Jaden's emotions and the difficulties between a Mortal/Elf relationship in a very adult way - but I expect that of your writing. I can see that eventually there will be an Erestor saga from his childhood to this story and beyond.
I wonder if you had to tone down the sex scene, which I thought both sexy and tender, for FFN *snort*. That would be a pity, but I never read on that site. The scene needed to be there and you also write the aftermath with a very mature mindset. :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for dropping by Spiced Wine! I admit to toning down the sex scene for FFN, I am guilty *sigh* but I wanted to stay true to the PG-13 rating. I think it came out well, even with the rating constraints... Maybe I'll rework this chapter at a later date, just for this cite. I've been thinking about going back and changing a few things already, but I think I'll wait until I've finished first. A date not too far away! Thank you for your words on the maturity of the chapter. I did a lot of thinking on what a Mortal/Elf relationship would really mean, and the many consequences of such a love. You always make me feel like such a good writer when you review! I am always flattered and humbled. Just wanted you to know your words are appreciated :D I've started writing the final chapter, and hope to have it up soon! I can't believe its almost over. It's kind of a relief, though I have gotten back into enjoying writing this story these last few weeks, which is as it should be. But then, its not really over, since I have lots more Erestor too write!!!
Ah! This was so beautiful. I believe there is hope in this relationship with Erester and Jaden. Sometimes it takes a while for the other party to realize that the one standing before you is the one meant for you. Especially one who waits patiently for the other to make that discovery. Great story. I have been following this since you first started and can't wait for the next update.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! Yes, hope still remains :) I hope it doesn't take Jaden too long to realize just exactly what she's feeling for Erestor! I've already started working on the next chapter, so I am hoping its done soon!
HMMMM... A Human who is NOT interested in the elf that loves her????
I REALLY want to see where you are going with this! I love this story and hope you feel up to updating soon :)
Sorry about the writer's block, hon'. But maybe it is because you really *want* to write in the First Age, and I definitely think you should - I like what you have done so far very much indeed. Sometimes we do block because we're impatient to write something else. I would say, 'Do it,' because I know what it is like to write what I don't want and I was virtually tearing my hair out.
I like this chapter because of Jaden's feelings about Erestor. There is no sudden: 'Oh, I was in love with him all the time and it just took his injury to make me realize.' This is good. It's not easy, it's not going to be all sorted out. What was wrong with her? Why wasn't she madly in love with the elf seated in front of her?
Whatever happens, well done for not taking the easy, obvious route.
Author's Response: I think you're right on the money there... I do crave First Age writing! But at the same time I really hate leaving things unfinished so, it may take me awhile, but I am determined to finish this one. But that doesn't mean I can't write some First Age stuff at the same time :D I will admit that my original story plan had something along the lines of Jaden getting this sudden realization of her love *cringe* I am glad I am taking the less obvious and more beleivable route, and even happier that people are appreciating it! Thanks, as always, for the review! I am off the read you're newest chapter for 'Power and the Passion" Yes!!!
YEAAAAAAAA!!!!!!! I had just wrote this off as a unfinished tale. Glad to have you back! excellent chapter, good forward progress.
Author's Response: Ah! Thanks so much for the review :) I am defiantly hoping this one isn't a write off. I am determined to finish it :D
Oh, I totally love the turn this story has taken (as I adore Erestor and a het Erestor romance is such a rarety) so even if it will never work between Jaden and Erestor, I don't mind. A girl can always hope, though.
For some reason I wish Jaden will find a female friend in Rivendell to help her through all the confusion. It may get repetitive if she only ever befriends males. Besides, a girl can't have a good girl talk with males, even if they would be very wise elves.
Author's Response: Hum... I think you have a point about the girl companionship, or lack there of. I kind of regret not introducing someone earlier in the story, but it's winding down now, so I doubt I'll add another character, but we'll see. I never wanted to go for the cliche servant/hand maiden elleth that the girl dropped into middle earth automatically befriends, but you're right, there is a definite lack of female elves in this story... Ah,well I am glad to hear you are still enjoying it. This chapter even surprised me a little! Thanks for the review! I'll do my best to get motivated for the next chapter :D
Poor Erestor .____.
This story is getting really good! I love the way you write, very descriptive and I can picture it all in my head! :D
Keep up the good work! :3
Author's Response: WOW! Thanks so much for the complement, I am humbled! Erestor does get all kinds of bad luck huh? I'll update soon's I can :D
Oh, now this is really good. I like the way you write Erestor a great deal.
My suggestion about the First Age was partly because sometimes I find people prefer to remain within their own gender when they write, but you write males very well. (Also, there are so many modern-girl-in-Middle-earth in the time of the War of the Ring, that one in the First Age would be unusual. I find the First Age a lot more interesting than the War of the Ring period, and it amazes me it's still a niche authorship and readership.)
However, I hope you do decide to write Erestor's back-story, (there were some tantalizing glimpses here) as you have got into his mind brilliantly in this chapter.
I tend to agree with you on not having Jaden gifted with immortality. Although it did happen (allegedly) to Tuor, the sadness of Elf-Mortal relationships are poignant, and too many authors like to suddenly *reveal* their character is really an Elf, because it would spoil a happy-ever-after. I have to say I'm impressed you're not going that route.
And I'm very impressed with this chapter. You have switched effortlessly from the point of view of a young Mortal woman to the mind of an Elf thousands of years old, which is extremely hard; two different mind-sets entirely.
(Just one thing - you spoke of Galadriel's 'cranial' thoughts. D'you mean carnal? :) ) Don't worry, I found where I had written 'invoked' when it should have been 'evoked' XD.
Well done and keep going! Siān
Author's Response: Opps! Thanks for the edit on carnal :D I agree with you about too many war of the ring girl-falls-into-Middle-Earth story's. I think I've grown as a writing while working on this piece, and I've also expanded my reading tastes in the same time. I've been working on this story for months, but where I am at right now, I think I would have really enjoyed writing a girl falls into Middle Earth in the First Age instead of going the route I choose, however it's a little late to change that now. But this is only my first story, and overall I am happy with the way it's turning out, so even if I would now go back and change the time and place, I still like it anyway. However, I would like to write more in the First Age, and a girl falls into Middle Earth then, might be on the list of potential stories, who knows? I always appreciate your reviews, and thank you for the complement on gender switching POV's :) Oh, and I can't wait for your next "The Power and the Passion" update! I check at least once a day :D
I am glad to see you back! I was afraid you had dropped the story. This was a great chapter, I really like the way you write Erestor. Good job yet again!
Author's Response: I really hope to finish this story. I've already written the last chapter in my head, it's just the getting there that seems to take awhile. I really hadn't envisioned the story being this long. Its only 15 chapters so far, but several of them are rather lengthy and there are still quite a few more to come, but I don't mind. I enjoyed writing it, I just hope I finish :) I am glad you like Erestor POV, I have found I enjoy writing him more then any other character! Thanks for the review.
:) I like when you get into Erestor's head. I also like that you have not made him a blushing ellon! Thanks for the update!
I am no canon lover myself, after all this is "Fanfiction." Canon rigidity is stifling.
Author's Response: Ah, thanks for the review! I also find that cannon can become stifling. I do not like stories which constantly quote the books, or worse the movies. The best are those that stay true to the world of Middle Earth, but bring their own story, or character interpretations. I have found I enjoy writing from Erestor's point of view the best :) I am considering writing a story about Erestor's past when I am finished with this one. Hope you keep reading!
Another interesting chapter. :]
I absolutely love Jaden! I hope she gets with Erestor, he needs love. XD
Hope you update soon!
Author's Response: Oh, yes Erestor is in need of a little love ;) Thanks for the review!!!!
I think this is a story that needed to be told, simply because of Tolkien's writing all dark-skinned people as enemies/servants of Morgoth/Sauron, but I have to say, I love your First Age flashbacks. The Silmarillion is still a niche fandom and I find it takes a lot of empathy and maturity to write well in it. Maybe you could write of Jaden in the First Age; of course something would have to happen so she could live long enough to see it through, but some Men did live extended life-spans (the Mouth of Sauron being one) Please think about it. So much time is spent on the Fellowship, although you have altered the usual plot by not having Jaden go with them, but I think your First Age writing has a touch of the *epic* about it, as in your other WIP, so I hope you think about Jaden in the First Age, perhaps d;-)
Author's Response: I am so sorry for taking so long to respond. I am truly humbled by your words. I feel the same way about First Age writing, which makes your response a hundred times more encouraging. I have toyed with the idea of writing another story going into Erestor's background in more depth. I will say though, that while your idea of Jaden living in the First age with expanded life span is intriguing, I don't think it will really work in the story. While I'd love for an ending where Jaden is somehow granted immortality/long life, I just don't think it reasonable. All the story's of mortal and elf pairing (Tuor and Idril being the exception) are bitter sweet, as I think they have to be. I can't see the Valar getting involved and granting Jaden immortality (not that that's what you had in mind). I just feel that Jaden is in the end mortal, and will die whether she gets with her elf lord or no. What affect her death will have on her mate I am keeping to myself. I don't want to let everything out of the bag :) I love hearing your thoughts and ideas on the story, and truly this is one of the most humbling reviews I have received. I hope you will not be too disappointed with Jaden living a normal life span :) And I haven't given up on my other WIP either :)
“Aragorn, do you feel like a murderer when you kill in battle?” She could have bitten her tongue out, after the hasty words were out. Well that's defiantly going to brighten his mood, she thought sarcastically.
Loved the Legolas kiss btw :D DEEEElightful!
And now without Aragorn & Legolas, Erestor can have some more time with her *wink*wink*nudge*nudge* ;)
ahhhhh I am loving the Erestor interaction! Oh silly young Jaden; I get a kick out of her not understanding. haha.
So officially, I love this story. If you have time to go through and do some heavy editing in certain places I think it will be outstanding. The storyline is very interesting and I can't stop reading :)