Interesting, and gritty! I doubt this story would get under the radar of ff.net, but I am glad you are posting it here: a site where you do not have to be careful to stray into adult territory. (one reason I will not read FFN is the attitude to slash and/or AU and the ban Adult writing).
I am not sure I have ever read a story from the point of view of an Elf tormented into an Orc, (no, I have not, I would remember.) and I am looking forward to more. It feels so tragic, and of course, being an angst lover, I drink up tragedy-fics. Her capture was brutal - and that was realistic; I feel some things should be told as they are, and that is one instance. Her coming around felt very true to how it would be - painful to read.
Thank-you for breaking up the paragraphs. Reading blocks of text on a monitor is much different to reading a book and makes me dizzy, so I appreciate the formatting.
Author's Response: I agree it probably wouldn't go over well on FFN! I have every intention of making this a gritty read. Its subject matter demands it, like u said. I just hope I can do it justice. There might be other elf turned orc storied out there, but I've never read one either. This is defiantly going to be angsty, it wouldn't be realistic to have a hunky dory ending, though I may wish very much I could give Castiel one in the end :( Thanks for the review!
I think your story premise has a lot of possibilities. What an interesting concept; to follow the path of an elf captured and tortured until she is nearly turned into an orc. I look forward to what your summary hinted at; how your elf may help Celebrian.
If I could offer a few suggestions: Could you put spaces between your paragraphs so it is easier to read? And perhaps go over your chapter again for editing purposes; there were several word misuses/spelling issues.
All in all I look forward to where this is going!