Glad you like her! The risk with OFCs is always that they risk to come across as Sueish. Anyhow, it was a sudden idea long inspired by a request by my little sister, that I made up a believable love for Legolas. I put that with my passion for Faramir, and my own idea of what being a Woodelf would be like. And there is Měriel. ;) Hope you keep enjoying! We are only one chapter from the ending now.
I have been wondering, have you studied Tolkien deeply? It seems that you have the language that he used which is awesome!
Author's Response: Hi there! Well, I read and re-read and rhen read again. I also suppose I have a natural tendency at writing solemsn and poetic...thanks for reviewing!
Intriging begining :D
"So simple sometimes our desires appear to be; and truly the deadliest of passions like to cloak themselves this way, and thus become our undoing. But I did not know it then; all I knew was of a quiet longing being born in the recesses of my heart till then uninhabited by any that did not belong to my family. If this were love, then it was a poison sweet to take."
That was beautifully worded!
I do like that she is a warrior, and better yet that she is not someone of import in society, it adds more mystery to her.
Your descriptions are well done, I can easily picture the sights and smells of the forest.
There were a few places where the more old fashioned sentence structuring you use breaks into the flow of the story, but overall I like that more antic sound you've achieved here. The only thing I will caution for, and this is my first chapter so it will probably be better later, but I did get a slightly distant feel from Miriel -her thoughts- with the older sentence stricture.
However, again, I did like that you chose to write it thus, and probably in a few chapter I wont notice it, but with a new character, one I don't know much about yet, it might be nice to be pulled into her character more deeply sooner... I am not sure that made much sense?
But well done, I shall work to fit in more reading :D I have noticed you update extremely quickly so I'll have to work not to get too far behind :D
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I would love to keep hearing what you'll think. :) The old structuring is an experiment, I'm trying to recapture the beautiful feeling of antiquity that belongs to the Elves of the Silmarillion. However don't worry, it shows especially when Měriel is considering in retrospect and thinking to herself; when there is action underway, it gets more narrative and simple. It is difficult to write, you know. ;) (Well, there is a reason why Tolkien is the Professor, and we are the humble fanfic writers. :P)