You have a real leg up on many new writers in that your dialogue is very clear. I feel you could improve the impression of Thenidiel's experience by showing us what she sees and feels a little more. It's summer: are the elves busy gathering food or is everyone out enjoying the warm weather so that she has no companions? Does she have to wear a prickly garland of summer flowers? (I always wondered about the implication of Thranduil's autumn-themed crown in The Hobbit. It suggested that he might have to wear a crown of icicles or holly in the winter, etc.)
Good luck with your story.
Author's Response: Thanks for the advise. I'll try a little harder now
Enjoy your writing, and don't think you should apologize for it. The important thing is to love writing about your original character and exploring her life and emotions. And characters have a way of growing as you write them until you wonder if you are writing them, or they are just using you to write their story. :D
Have fun. :) And don't worry because every-one is nervous when they first publicly post on an archive. The people on here are kind and supportive, but the most important thing is for you just to enjoy telling your story.
Author's Response: Thanks.
Hello! New to lotrfanfiction? Let me be one of the first ones to give you a warm welcome! True, this was really short but it's a whole lot better than my first story. I didn't find any errors whatsoever.. Are you going to create another story about Leggy's sis? Hope so. I hardly see any stories here where Legolas even has a sister... Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I think I will put up more stories about her. This is the first review I got and I'm taking it to heart. If you want you can tell me about something you'd like to read about and I'll write about it. So, once again, thanks!