I like this very much, and I do think you should keep on writing. There is very little written about Eldarion and the Fourth Age, which is a pity.
That's a nice, elegant opening paragraph for a story, by the way. :) It's a good *hook*.
This is your first and only and it is so very good. Please, you must write more. I have heard other author's much better than I am give this advise. Try to write every day. You do not have to post, but write something for yourself every day.
Give us more!