Well, you asked for my honest opinion. I am no professional so I cannot critique this too much. Maybe a beta reader can better help you with that. Now about the story, you did make me think about Elrond raising Aragorn. It is said that elves don't get sick. But Aragorn is human, mostly. I began to ponder the thought of Elrond having to know something about human sicknesses and how to cure them if he was to be responsible for Aragorn's upbringing. It might have proven to be quite challenging in the beginning. Aragorn had to learn to live with the elves just as much as Elrond had to learn about raising a young human. Interesting. Continue on and let's see where this goes.
Welcome and congrats on your first story. I think it has potential. I feel bad for Elrohir being the one to have to tell Elrond about the accident. I get the feeling he's gonna to be pretty upset.
Author's Response: Whoa thanks, i didn't think anyone would read it that fast. thanks, any constructiove criticizm and please be honist