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Title: Chapter 37 The Last Deep Breath Reviewer: Melusine Signed
Another breathtaking chapter, Ziggy. I don't know how you manage to keep the tension ratcheted up, but you do, and it's amazing!
Date: Oct 20 2011 03:46 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 37 The Last Deep Breath Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
I really enjoyed seeing things through Pippin's eyes here. It was a nice break from all the usual tension. The end of your chapter was the best part though. I love your description of the darkness and mist. I can really feel the dread and fear as if I am actually there. Elrohir seems much different here, better, stronger, more confident. I see it in the way he comforts the men, tries to give them some of his own confidence. I feel him even out a bit as he senses Elladan's calmness. And to have him stand next to Legolas makes me see how far he has come since the beginning when there was so much animosity. They will fight together, not against one another. Makes my skin tingle a bit. Looking forward to the Black Gate.

Author's Response: It's funny how easily Pippin comes to me, his voice is the easiest to write. I'm pleased the dread got you- I wasn't sure how much to put in but you'll need that for hte next chapter! Elrohir ha really got himself back to where he wants ot be with his own state of mind I htink -the obvious love Elladan adn Legoals have for him restores his self-esteem and confidence but its fragile. Ah- so much can go wrong yet!! xx
Date: Oct 11 2011 01:55 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 37 The Last Deep Breath Reviewer: Lisse Signed
Ziggy, I enjoyed this chapter as much as every one before. Pip writing a mental letter to Merry is brilliant on your part and exactly what I would expect from Pippin.
Oh and Legolas looking at the twins like Sam looks at Rosie, it made me chuckle, and the fact pip thinks everyone is blind but him.
Very much enjoyed the last few lines.

Elrohir's hand rested on the hilt of his dark bladed sword. His black hair was pulled back from the strong and stern face, but his grey eyes were intent and he went and stood near Legolas, so close that they almost, but did not quite, touch. Together they stood, here on the edge of Mordor, before the final battle. They did not speak but Legolas leaned towards him slightly and in the cold air, his low, wordless song misted and mingled with Elrohir's breath.

This might be the last loving moment they share. The self imposed ban (from Elrohir) allows only their songs to swirl about each other. What you have done is beautiful and mystic. I love it and thank you for all the effort you put into your writing. I know words of gold like yours do not just effortlessly jump onto a page.
Thanks Zig!
With Love, Candy

Author's Response: Pippin is wonderful- easy to write and just great fun. I like writing him. You are right- it's hard work but such a joy to get comments back- the best thing in the world is to see that someone actually reads and enjoys what I've written. It makes it worth all the work. Hope you liked your little extra candy! xx
Date: Oct 03 2011 02:03 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 37 The Last Deep Breath Reviewer: Lisse Signed
Ziggy, It is 7:20 a.m. in Gahanna, Ohio and when I saw that you had posted this I actually cheered.Now I get to spend my morning in my favorite way, reading the most excellent of fan fic and drinking tea. ALONE!

Reading Now.

Author's Response: sounds lovely - my favourite thing too.
Date: Oct 01 2011 11:27 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 36 Reviewer: Melusine Signed
Ziggy, I've already said a few times how much I love this chapter and can't really think of anything else to add except: Brilliant, BRILLIANT writing!

Author's Response: Thank you Fran. I think I got my style back after really rushing through the previous one or two chapters to be fair. Next one is with Anar although I cant help tinkering with it. Are you happy for me to send it to you for a quick respone before posting? x
Date: Sep 21 2011 06:08 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 36 Reviewer: Lisse Signed
Once again I have read this chapter almost daily since you posted it. I am thrilled that the twins have broken the silence. One of the most touching things I have read is Elladan healing Elrohir. So true, their father is the greatest healer imaginable and did not recognize his own son’s emotional trauma. What a great job you did with this.

I loved Legolas telling Arogorn exactly what he would be doing and where for the rest of the night. It made me laugh out loud. Now it was a surprise when Elrohir came to him and was the voice of reason. But Legolas does not want reason, he wants comfort. I feel his disappointment and very endearingly his youth also. As you say he is considered young among his folk.

I take such a long time to review because I really think about what to say. You are a marvel Ziggy and I think every single word is perfect. You really have the gift to take your readers to another place and make them feel like it is real. I love and care about your characters. As always, a great big thank you for writing for us. I brag about you to everyone who will give me even half an ear. You truly are better than Tolkien, but I am glad to have him because with out him you would not be writing this for all of us.

Love Candy

Author's Response: I am so glad Elladan is generous an dso very very kind. As L8 says, he does need some sort of recompense and that is mulling around in my head - I'm not sure when I iwll have any time to write though so it will be a little whle before another update I'm afraid. Yes, Aragorn isn't a fool even though he has quite underestimated Gimli - I have a little scene in my head for later. And I was as surprised as anyone that Elrohir is so reasonable, but htink he has calmed because Elladan has begun healing him and so he is albe to see through his rage. He has hidden it for so long that it is his reaction to Legolas that unlocks his desire and passion so perhaps it is hardly surprsing that he has been able to hide. I like to get reviews any time- so late ones are just as welcome as early ones.Never worry about that as long as you send me a comment. I get very demorialsied when there are few comments. I am flattered by what you say and it is Tolkien's world we are in and to be so convinced it is 'real' is his great and epic imagination. But I love that you think that - soooo good for my ego!!xx
Date: Sep 03 2011 02:57 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 36 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
My heart aches for the twins. I so want them to mend their hurts, but I know it cannot be instant. Any real hurt such as this would take a lot of soul searching before forgivness can be given. On a lighter side, poor poor Aragorn, always the last to know. I mean, even Pip has a clue. But hey, Aragorn's had a lot on his mind lately. Still, I wouldn't play poker with him. He's good at reading people and there's no doubt he'd take all my money, lol. I'm also liking the way Legolas and Elrohir are advancing, even if they need to cool things down and put their feelings on hold. I like this Elrohir. It's nice to see him coming out of that darkness. And one more thing. As you know, Candy and I often talk about your story, break it apart, analyze it, get into the heads of your characters. We both agree that your Elladan is irresistable and would like to see him happy with someone. As much as it would be pleasing to see him with Legolas, I don't think he should. Legolas is untamed and more Elrohir's match than Elladan. Ell needs someone much more tame I think. I couldn't even begin to suggest a canon character. This is kind of out of my genre. Do you know Zig, that I am a devoted HET girl, and here you have me asking for your slash? That's just how good you are. I look beyond the act with your stories because it is about much more than that. Now, only you know what you want to write and I would not be disappointed if you didn't write an Elladan story. I just needed to tell you how much I really enjoy your work and anything you write will be looked for with anticipation. Reading your stories always gives me a boost when I'm struggling with my own. So, thanks for taking the time to give us such talented work. You are an inspiration.

Author's Response: That comment about Legolas being a better match for Elrohir is spot on L8. He is a bit too wild for Elladan and I suspect he would end up hurting Elladan who is perhaps not quite exciting and wild enough for him. I know you and Lisse are rooting for him and I WILL write something after I fifnsh Sons- I am just focusing on that first. (You say such nice things - make me blush xx)
Date: Aug 24 2011 03:27 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 36 Reviewer: ebbingnight Signed
This is such a wonderfully rich, moving chapter, but I'll just say that my favorite "bit" is Pippin pretending to be asleep under his blanket and knowing exactly what is going on (Aragorn is so very wrong about his not knowing about the really important things!) just by the tenderness in those two voices that he hears, even though he can't understand any of the language. A perfect ending to this very long, emotionally wearing day for all (including us readers!)

Author's Response: Oh, I am so gald you like that bit- I wrote it half way through Elladan's bit - Pippin is so easy to write because Tolkine is very clear with his voice and Pippin just speaks to me in th at unconsciouls and blabbering way. I will come back to him in the next chapter I expect and have a nice bit that I think will stay in where he is watching Aragorn questioning Gimli in waht he thinks is a sublte way and Gimli hjust gettingmore and more anxious and horrified! Watch out for it! I love Aragorn - and it just amuses me to think he really is going to get himself very confused before the end!!
Date: Aug 23 2011 06:39 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 35 Reviewer: Lisse Signed
After reading this chapter at least a dozen times, I am still not ready to review, but I have to. It would be a crime if I did not tell you how perfect it is. Your description of the Nazgul attack from Elrohir’s pov is the best “battle” scene ever. It is just like we are there.

Then Elladan’s introspection, guided by the evil mind twisting of the Nazgul, very good. I cannot help but feel immense sympathy for him, “generous soul that he is”. Again, L8bleumer and I were talking and as she says in her review, can’t we have a little love for Elladan? He is so beautiful.

Oh and I noticed the contrast between the brother’s implements of war. Elrohir has a fiery sword that Legolas and many fear. Elladan has a pure white sword. I find both appealing. Legolas, however, needs someone as strong and passionate as himself. Elrohir is his challenge answered. Elladan would have made a sweet love, but would have had his heart broken like Eomer. I see Legolas likes a strong lover, and hope Elro gives him all he deserves, ;).

While he is gentler than his brother, Elladan is no wimp. I love the image of him charging up the stairs 4 at a time. How very strong. I Love that he takes control and commands the archers!

In the end, It seems Legolas is finally healed and faces his fear. Oh he is so brave! No one but Thranduilion could have stood the gruesome attack.

Ziggy, surely it will take more than a few chapters to wrap this up. We have the battle and the aftermath.

Thank you for this and I look forward to reading your spicier version on the other site!

Love, Candy

Author's Response: Ah Candy - you and Mo!! OK- Elladan can have something but probably after this is finished- I cant cope with more right now... and it might not be in the AU but another one so it may be he ends up with Legolas and Elrohir can stil be all hatey and fiery about Mirkwood...oh I dont know. Or maybe Imrahil... I did sow a little seed back at Pelennor for that so perhaps I'll pick it up... or maybe write an AU of my wn AU with Elladan to be a follow on for Below Decks. Anyway, you two are great for my ego so I will keep writing even if I only post it to you two until it gets so rubbish even you dont want ot read it anyway:) XX
Date: Aug 16 2011 12:57 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 35 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
This was hands down THE best chapter of yours I have ever read. There's not one thing I can point out seperately that I liked more. I loved everything. Just let me ask one question. Any thoughts on giving Elladan his own story? You write him wonderfully. Poor guy deserves someone to love him too. Excellent work. I can't believe it's almost over.

Author's Response: Funny, I've been thinking that too. Below decks isn't going to be enough, is it? I have thought Imrahil was quite a nice character but so far, nothing's come of it. Maybe just for you... xx
Date: Aug 16 2011 02:15 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 35 Reviewer: ebbingnight Signed
Don't think that we didn't notice the way in which Elrohir realized even through his growing weakness that he would risk everything there on the ramparts to save his beloved... and in the end Legolas saved him from that long fall into darkness!

I only hope it's an omen, not an ending

Author's Response: Ah, ebbingnight- you never miss a thing! ANd yes, Legolas saved him..where does that lead them? They still have a little way to go yet. xx
Date: Aug 13 2011 11:21 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 35 Reviewer: Mindirith Signed
This is such a wonderful chapter! the tension, but also the reconciliation (I was just plain cheering when Elladan decided to forgive Elrohir), and Legolas getting most of his memories (especially the difficult ones, I guess Gandalf must be one heck of a psychiatrist, for Legolas to be dealing with the mountain memories so wel). I am glad he has Gimli and Pippin, and I hope he has Elrohir also at his side at this point. He needs them all, as torn up as he is. I wonder what happened to Aicanaro. Did Legolas leave it on the ledge? Is Elrohir finally rid of it? Though I supposed that would be a curse as well, as they are on the eve of a great battle, in which he will need weapons he is used to. Is Elrohir going to be healed enough to continue? You keep me on hot coals!

Author's Response: Aicanaro...there's a bit more of his story in the enxt chapter, more hints at where he has come from and who forged him - just hints though. But you are right- Elrohir will need him if he fights the Nazgul again. Elrohir's shoulder is going to be a problem, isn't spoilers though!
Date: Aug 13 2011 02:39 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 33 Reviewer: L8Bleumr Signed
Hey Ziggy. Playing catch up. It's been a busy summer full of family stuff, but school's back in session, which means my days are less hectic. Any spare moments I had, I used for writing, so not much time to read. As always, great stuff. I love how Legolas is slowly remembering, but not just that, he is seeing his mistakes like the Elrohir/Eomer thing. And thanks for the end notes. I have just started reading Silm and did not know that fact. You are right, it makes Gimli's gift much more important than most would think.

Author's Response: Hi L8! Glad you have caught up then -I know what you mean about using spare time to write. I am way behind in reading but as this is drawing to a finish, I amsaving all my favs to read afterwards. I need to get this done in the next couple of weeks if I can.
Date: Aug 12 2011 12:56 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 35 Reviewer: Melusine Signed
I love this chapter! And the title works very well. So tense there on the walls of Osgiliath with Elrohir teetering, trying to reach Legolas, then falling over. But the scene with Elladan thinking about Elrohir and everything that's happened, and his thoughts growing darker and darker, then realizing they weren't his own, that was just brilliant. But I just love Pippin in this. So inquisitive and so right about Legolas' feelings for Elrohir. Then I loved his 'mixture of admiration and surprise' at the idea of Legolas up on the walls with both the brothers. That still makes me giggle. So again just a wonderful combination of tension and humor. :)

Author's Response: Thank you Melusine- but you had such a part in this too! Sorry - just relaised I forgot to add that to the notes. Going to do that now xx
Date: Aug 11 2011 02:44 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 34 Yzira Reviewer: Lisse Signed

So sorry it has taken me so long to review, but I will review you a dozen times to keep you writing, and no matter the place you post I will read and review you. I just needed to say this and will read again and say more.

Legolas stronger than Elrohir? Of course! And oh what an image of your beautiful Legolas submitting yet remaining in control as he kneels for Elrohir. I can just see all that long blond hair spilling over his shoulders, fluttering in the breeze! And I love Legolas come back when Ro says he will destroy him… “You flatter yourself Noldor.” We know what Elrohir means of course.

If Elrohir was not possessed by the Nazgul he would not have treated Legolas so harshly. He will hate himself all the more now for his abuse of his beloved, and for failing to protect Legolas.

Thank you for another incomparable chapter or two. Love you Ziggy. So looking forward to more!

Love Candy

Author's Response: Hello my dear Candy! Thank you for the lovely support you always give-it's worht writing just for you! And there's a new chapter waiting for you when you look next. Love Ziggy
Date: Aug 11 2011 11:01 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 34 Yzira Reviewer: Mindirith Signed
Legolas appears to be a perfect match to Elrohir. He also seems to have an instinctive dislike of Elrohir's blade. Wonderful. But... Please don't leave us hanging like this! You can't leave this story with a cliffhanger! I don't know why I didn't get an update this time, I accidentally figured out that you added 2 new chapters. I hope you will write, and either post the new chapters here or on Faerie. I will be waiting with baited breath. I enjoy your story too much not to.

Author's Response: I will be finishing it here but when I post on Faerie, I'll be redrafting it and adding spice etc. I didn't really know where this was going to end up so it's nice to be able to go back and take my time with it. Yes...Aicanaro is taking on a life of his own. I'm not sure what he's up to
Date: Aug 04 2011 01:36 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 34 Yzira Reviewer: elflove2011 Signed
Beautiful as always and thanks for the sex scene, we all appreciate it! As always I had to re-read this a few times as you pack your wonderful detail so tightly I am afraid that I will miss something... I really did feel for Elrohir during this chapter, can't wait for the next installment, come back from your holiday quickly!

Author's Response: Yes, I had so many people saying they were disappointed when Legolas woke up i really elt obliged! But it would have wronbg to have had it there and Elrohir needs to learn to give up control. Hope you like the next chapter as much.
Date: Jul 30 2011 05:54 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 34 Yzira Reviewer: ebbingnight Signed

Oh, if this is the last, terrible memory that Elrohir has of our brave, beautiful Legolas, it is certain that he now will choose death, the gift of Men, in order to forget what his own Song has brought to his beloved: he won't want to survive.

Author's Response: Never fear my dear! I would not do that cruel thing to Elrohir. He has to be redeemed yet. But you are right, if anything happens to Legoals... or if he THINKS it has happened, he is in great danger of giving up everything. Hope you enjoy the next chapter.
Date: Jul 27 2011 04:43 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Keeping Watch Reviewer: Alpha Ori Signed
I know what you mean, my beta is on holiday and I am just about holding back publishing my next story. However, I must say that I think the chapter is very challenging from a punctuation point of view, yet it would make all the difference - brilliant though it still is.
Date: Jul 27 2011 08:02 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 34 Yzira Reviewer: Alpha Ori Signed
I am in Spain, it is 1 o'clock in the morning, and it is still 24C - however, the thermic sensation has risen to at least 40, if I am not mistaken.
I would say so much about this chapter, 99.9 % of it good - wonderful.
I found the first half of the story did not flow so well, partly due, I believe to a few punctuation issues. But your descriptive narrative, the gradual build up of suspense as Elrohir climbs the stairs, as he succumbs to the black voices, only to realize - too late, that it was not him - but his hunters. Your imagery is wonderful, evokes the scenes you describe almost visually - Another fantastic, enthralling and truly skillful piece of writing.

Author's Response: Ah- I need ot go back againt then- it was, like you, very late and I changed things after Anarithiline had beta'd. I spent sol ong reading and proof reading over and over I htink sometimes you lose sight of it. No time now- I'll do it when I come back. Thank you.
Date: Jul 26 2011 11:20 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 33 Reviewer: Alpha Ori Signed
This is a particularly well-written chapter, in my humble opinion. I particularly like your descriptions of the ruined stonework - very effective. I also think this 'recovery' chapter is so very central to I assume lies ahead, and that will allow Legolas (I hope), to hava a hand in it.
This new twist, where Legolas believes his estrangement with Elrohir is his fault, promises much drama and angst.
I eagerly await the explicit sex, it is about time these two get their act together.
Great work!

Author's Response: Thank you, Alpha. That is always particualry nice to hear from a fellow writer. Yes- you can see now, having read the next chapter, how improtnat it was to have this slower pace adn gradual recovery.
Date: Jul 26 2011 12:39 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Keeping Watch Reviewer: Mindirith Signed
Thank you very much! I did not expect anywhere near so complete a response. I greatly appreciated. I wanted to pose the questions, but expected to just wait for the next chapters for the answers. I had not thought about the glamour, that makes a lot of sense. I did assume that loosing oneself in such a host was not too difficult, if it were not for this "sense" Legolas seems to have of feeling Elrohir. But of course the glamour takes care of that. And you are right, of course. Thank you for refreshing my memory. Remembering those things makes it much more logical, I apologize for forgetting. I found The sons of Thunder not that long ago, but it was quite a read all at once. I loved every minute of it though. I will probably go back to the beginning, and re-read, just so I will be ready, and completely caught up for the next chapter. Which I am looking forward to. Thank you for doing such a great job.

Author's Response: Well it was useful for me too to have those questions asked- it nudges me that I need o tremind readers what has gone on before and to expalin things again - I read very quickly too and sometimes miss details that make me question the story. I appreciate those questions. So you will see in the next chapter how you have helped me to make things clearer! And the next chapter is quite an importnat one in terms of Legolas' memory and Elrohir. Thank you again.
Date: Jul 04 2011 01:48 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 32 A Memory of Rohan Reviewer: mientje Signed
so beautiful , how not to fall in love with your characters !

Author's Response: well I am honoured to be the recipient of your first review on this site. Thank you.
Date: Jul 03 2011 12:36 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 32 A Memory of Rohan Reviewer: Lisse Signed
Again a very beautiful moving chapter. The fact that the horses were all overjoyed to when Legolas came into the stable was as charming as could be. I can just see Legolas walking briskly into the stable and whistling tunelessly as you say.

Legolas is so brave. I love what he said about impossible odds and great danger, that’s what wood elves are good at.

I was absolutely delighted when he smiled at the herald and made the poor lad forget his own name.

Oh and Zig, don’t tell me you were not trying to break my heart when Eomer told Legolas he would love him again if only the elf would let him. My goodness! Poor dear smitten Eomer. He seems so infatuated. I know what must happen. I also know Legolas lovers Elro, but Eomer love Legolas just the same. He is so tender and caring and I love that he tosses his pride away to sink to his knees and help Legolas with the army he commands streaming around them. Eomer is a beautiful soul, strong, strong enough to be gentle.

Many thanks for this!! I am endlessly glad you are still posting here for us. What a great loss to the site it would be if you were not here.

Author's Response: I am still posting here for the time being, Lisse, but I am also posting on ESteliel's new site- which is full of wonderful writers I have not read before and an easy site to use. I will give Keith a chance but to be honest, I like waht he has been saying on his blog less and less. I don't liek the veiled threats that say things like - nothing will change yet - and suggestions tha tthese things can be looked at again later. But give the guy a chance too. My suspicion is he has seen a chance with the new Hobbit film and expects a massive upturn- which will happen. And then seek to seel the site or sell advertising. Anyway- I could go on. Ah, Eomer. He just won't lie down, will he. And he is lovely in htis. And Legolas has to be very very gentle, doesnt he. And if Elrohir does reject Legolas, the last thing the lef should do is go and revive what eh had with Eomer on the rebound...isnt it? Well... you know...Legolas is unpredictable. So he could go one way or the other. LOve Zig
Date: Jul 03 2011 10:25 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 32 A Memory of Rohan Reviewer: Mindirith Signed
Poor Legolas! I am not sure Gandalf is really doing him a favor by keeping all his memories locked up. I love the chapter, as I have enjoyed the rest of your story. I always look forward to the next chapter. "Legolas catches up with Elrohir and feels much, much better" I was going to ask what Elrohir thought he was doing, that his absence seems to be doing more harm then good to Legolas, but at least in the next chapter they seem to get together. I am curious as to how Elrohir manages to evade Legolas' eyes. Wouldn't Legolas have been able to describe Rvyon to Gimli, who should have been able to figure out that he meant at least one of the sons of Elrond? And shouldn't Legolas have seen Elladan and asked him? I am very much enjoying the story, and looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: In answer to your very fair questions -Elrohir really thinks that he is destructive and will be bad for Legolas- he thinks he cannot control himself and so the best thing s to keep away. He also hates himself so much he beleives he does not deserve Legolas- he thinks he should have stayed away and let Elladan have him. The 'glamour' he puts on himself is easy for him. He is after all, Galadriel's grandson and Elrond's son- in the saemw ay the cloaks of Lorien have th epower to conceal in the weave, and the ropes come undone on their own. Also, it is easy to lose yourself amongst 7000 men and Elrohir wants to evade Legoals- Legoals is focused on looking for him and in the next chaper you wil lsee he finds a different way to find him, and is more successful. And your point about why Legolas doesnt just describe Raveyon to Gimli is a good one - but if you read it again, you will see that Gimli just nods and grutns whenever he mentions him, so Legolas assumes he knows whom he is talking about. Also no on e really want s to remind him of waht happened on the mountain in case it drives him back into the place -the memory of the Nazgul. Elladan is nowhere in sight at any time that Legolas is around- he had already left before Legolas arrives - I did that purposely. He does not ride up with Aragorn either. Gandalf has screened the memeories to give Legolas a chance to heal. Remember how he woke in the houses of Healing, screaming? He would not be able to ride with the Host if Gandalf had not done that and Gandaf knows Legolas should be there at the end - see earlier chapters. But Gandalf does not have limitless power anyway so already that wall is crumbling. Better for Legolas to be confused by Elrohir than to be stuck in that place screaming like he was in the Houses of Healing I htink. To some extent this chapter is about setting up the next stage and they still have a long way to go - dont worry. It will alll be resolved.
Date: Jul 03 2011 03:50 am [Report This]
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