things are begining to heat up! I have hope for Legi and Rhav. He needs a strong elf maiden!
Author's Response: thanks lj. They will heat up soon. lol
I like the line, "when they had been tortured enough". I like Antien. What does his name mean?
very vivid picture of a Mirkwood occation. You can be proud of your writing!
Author's Response: Antien is a true friend, Rhav's best friend. His name means gift.
Legolas must be infuriated, but he did the right thing and promoted Rhav. As young as he is, he is an Elf of integrity and you have to admire that
Author's Response: He lets the thought play through his mind but will not make a snap decision. It was how he was taught, though Rhav pushes his buttons.
Rhavaniel doesn't really seem at all enamoured with Legolas- very cool and in control, whereas he seems quite sweetly determined to woo her. That show she put on was very sophisticated and I have ended up feeling quite sorry for Legolas!! He doesnt have a chance and she may end up breaking his heart! She is too suspicious of him- the recommendation was quite genuine after all but she seems determined to suspect him.
Author's Response: Rhavaniel and Legolas are too wrapped up in their training and besting each other to know what might be slowly boiling under the surface. I like to think that the female is much better at hiding her feelings than the male. Legolas might act like he is not interested but he can't hide it as well. It might be his downfall eventually.
Ah- so there you go! Poor Antien- don't think he has much chance really. And we all know why Legolas walked away so quickly- surprised he could walk at all probably!!
Author's Response: You don't know how far from the truth that is (about Antien). Haha, Legolas would have to work very hard not to walk with a limp.
You do such a good job of building suspense and wanting to make the reader anxious to read the next word, the next sentence, the next paragraph. I'm really liking these two!
Author's Response: Thank you so much Duchess. I really like these two also. Rhavaniel has grown on me so much. I think she is what I wish I could be. Glad you are still enjoying this tale.
Looks like she's going to give Legolas a difficult time now that she's bested him, but I can't picture him willingly surrendering often. Poor guy, even a prince will probably have to put up with some ribbing over an elleth getting the upper hand.
Author's Response: And it's not over yet. She is going to compete with him again but with a goal. He may be a Prince but he cannot control everything.
i think what i'm liking about this story is the conflict. I don't ever think i've ever read a story about two people who conflict is that they are highly competetive and have a need to outdo each other. It is a unique and clever idea.
Author's Response: They will feel a certain animosity toward each other as long as their pride and passion for being the best gets in the way. They are young yet.
Oh my. To have legolas whisper his surrender. It must have been difficult for Rhav to be submisive also. Could you introduce me to the Elves above. Another great chapter that builds tention.
Author's Response: Rhav and Leg had battled in words many times but never like this. It will be a difficult journey for them both. As far as the other elves, well... one you will meet in a little while.
I think this one is building into somehting big. you've got envy and dislike, friction, tension betweent these two. Great for building conflict, which always makes characters more interesting. I very much enjoy you writing voice. You are a storyteller, instead of a writer, and that's what I want to read. If the characters are believible and I can bond withthem, any crazy stuff that happens I will believe. Writers are boring. Storytellers are facinating. And believe me that's a compliment cause ordinarily I would never read anything having to do with elves. I just dont' get them...Ever thought about writing category romance? I think you would be good at it. Very good. Keep up the good work
Author's Response: Thank you for such an encouraging review Duchess. I'm am always glad to see someone try something new. You are not the first to ask about the romance thing. I love doing romance and conflict and I hope it comes through in my stories. Maybe some day I can expand on it. For now, this is good practice. The world of writing is very new to me and reviews like yours revitalize me, especially when I'm starting something new.
Again,a very enjoyable chapter. I like the fact that you make young Legolas and Rhavaniel are rascles, jealous, and competative. They are real and I started loving them at once! Beautiful job L8. They are young teens, it would seem, an age when affection might very well be expressed by giving someone a rasberry.
I have had a great morning reading you, Mel and Zig. Does Sunday morning get any better?
Author's Response: Only thing to make it better would be to have your delicious elves to snuggle up to. lol ; - ). I'm glad you like the chemistry between Leg and his rival. Nothing but rasberries and cuties at that age.
Oh sweet! And very well writen. You are always good, but this is one of your very best. I dearly love it. What a sweet family moment you have capture. I think this is exactly how Legolas may have reacted and exactly how his mother and father may have responded. One indulges, the other teaches. No wonder Legolas grows up injto such a fine prince. Applause! Very very good dear L8!
Author's Response: Thank you once again lj. You know how to make an author feel good. If you notice, this is the Thranduil and Alastegiel I write about in my other story "Duel w/ Destiny".
It is a short start so I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: It's so nice to see you have joined in for another adventure. Yes, it was a short chapter, but trust me, there is much more to come. It's difficult to review at such an early stage. Thanks for reading.