Very sweet and cheeky...loved it girl...keep up the good work...your friend and fellow Haldir lover...Brandy
Author's Response: Thanks for your support. I'm trying to work on the next chapter but finding it difficult to know where to go. I'll get there though.
I love this story..UPDATE PLEASE...hugs fellow Haldir lover!
Author's Response: Thanks! Will update soon.
As elves really arent my thing, a story about elves has to be really entertaining for me to read it, and i think this story has that potential. It flows very well and is smooth and easy to read. The dialouge between the characters is realistic and fun. There was only one thing I noticed. I don't know what anybody looks like. Paragraphs of prose with similes and metaphors aren't necassary, but it would be nice to have, at minimum, a general description. Like is the Master Healer "a moth eaten specimen" or does he have "the boyish good looks of an elf half his age." Oh, and location too. I wasn't sure if this was Lothlorien or Mirkwood. You could drop the location right there in the first sentence of the second paragraph. Don't ever give up and don't get discouraged!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for this. I guess I didn't think to say where it was because of Haldir and most people know he's in Lothlorien. And of course you are right about descriptions. It is so simple yet I never even mention it. I guess I should spend a little more time going over my chapter before I post it. You have helped me tremendously. Thanks again for the advice.
It was very gallant of Haldir to offer to help find more herbs. Looks like they will be a good mix.
Author's Response: I can imagine him no other way. I think Haldir is a very honorable elf and dedicated to those he loves and respects. Thanks for reading.
Very enjoyable- a little romance in Haldir's life is always good and I like th eway you structured it so neatly, their conversation is based upon their shared experience, the herb garden, her name ( a bit smooth there, Haldir!! That should warn her!) ANd he has something to look forward to. Nicely written too with no overkill or description or hyperbolic emotion. Looking forward to seeing how this works out if you write more.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for being my first reviewer. I really admire your work and take this as a great compliment. In this piece, Haldir is still young, not yet the Marchwarden and has not developed that smooth technique yet, lol. There will definitely be more. I am enjoying this hobby very much.