I love the humor between the different factions of Elves, though personally I revere the Noldor, dark hot-headed fallen angels of Arda. I love how your story is full of OCs, not many do that, and I am of that few as well. So keep writing, I am loving this.
Author's Response: Thanks very much for your reviews :) I didn't intend to have so many OCs but they just seem to have grown out of the story and I kinda like them :) I'm glad you enjoy the humour, I don't like how most elves are portrayed as really stern boring scribes who spend their days painting or singing; I think they have real personality & feeling and a hidden depth that is sometimes forgotten and some are stoic, but there's stuff that goes deeper than that :) Thanks again!
The elves stared; watching the great silver orb rise. The stars seemed pale and distant in comparison. The guard quite forgot what he was supposed to tell his Lord. The silver orb, that the guard mentally started to name “Ithil” or the Shine, hung in the sky, casting its light deep into the four corners of Arda; places that had not seen light for so long, that had forgotten that light ever existed.
Such a vivid way of describing how the Moon first rose, how fitting when news of the Noldor returning to Middle-earth has spread.
The light, like ribbons of pearl dust, snaked across the sky. The water was cast silver, liquid metal instead of solid onyx.
Such a beautiful description of the first moonrise!
I also love Doriath, and this The silver orb, that the guard mentally started to name “Ithil” or the Shine, hung in the sky, casting its light deep into the four corners of Arda; places that had not seen light for so long, that had forgotten that light ever existed.
Your descriptions are always a real feast for the senses, and I appreciate the fact that you are focusing on many different characters and their viewpoints. It gives the story a true Silmarillion epic feeling.
Author's Response: Thanks very much :) Glad you liked it :)
I am so behind on reading and reviewing! I just wanted to say that I really like the way you've begun this. The sequence with Círdan and Evelyn communicate like this while she is unconcious, is a nice effect.
I am not sure why this genre of fic is not more popular than those set in the time of the War of the Ring, since the Silmarillion is so epic, but I'm happy to see some-one writing one! It's also unusual to see the first chapter focused also on Círdan and his thoughts, as modern-person-in-Middle-earth stories can tend to be very 'me-me-me,' but this is far more balanced; it's a good way to begin.
Author's Response: Thanks :) couldn't have done it without your help. hopefully I'll start writing faster now seen as though it's taken me since last year to actually finish the first chapter but I've got the plot line mostly sorted now :) thanks for the review