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Title: Prologue Reviewer: Dark_Elf Signed
This is pretty good. Can't wait till more! :D
Date: 28/01/05 - 01:38 pm [Report This]
Title: Prologue Reviewer: Anais Signed
I like the premise for the story and you seem to convey your thoughts very well. I hope more chapters will be updloaded soon.

There is a bit of a problem with grammar and spelling, however. It happens to all of us and that's why it's a good idea to proof and edit a few times.

You also might want to use new paragraphs for dialogue. That makes it a lot clearer and easier to read.
Date: 21/10/04 - 04:36 pm [Report This]
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