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Reviewer: Dark_Elf Signed [Report This]
Date: 28/01/05 - 06:38 pm Title: Prologue

This is pretty good. Can't wait till more! :D

Reviewer: Anais Signed [Report This]
Date: 21/10/04 - 08:36 pm Title: Prologue

I like the premise for the story and you seem to convey your thoughts very well. I hope more chapters will be updloaded soon.

There is a bit of a problem with grammar and spelling, however. It happens to all of us and that's why it's a good idea to proof and edit a few times.

You also might want to use new paragraphs for dialogue. That makes it a lot clearer and easier to read.

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