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Reviewer: ttbenanza Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/06/12 - 03:48 am Title: Chapter 1-The Call

Well, so far she kind of seems a bit Mary-sueish. Just telling you that so maybe you can make her less so in future chapters. I haven't read the second chapter yet, so I can't be sure if she is a Mary-sue or not yet...
Also, I understand this was a Prologue of sorts, but try to make the chapters longer so the reader can get more of a feel for where the story is going as well as the characters in it. :)

Author's Response: I very much appreciate the review! I have tried to increase the length of the chapters and give more of a taste of the characters and their relationships. Please feel free to let me know what you would like to see as the story progresses.

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