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This is "fudging" amazing! I hope you write more soon!Author's Response: Thank you very much :)
I'm working on the next chapter as soon as I can
The plot thickens.Figures Boromir wouldnt know to wrap it up. And Cory was that desperate.
Thriller vibe is really hitting.
The plot with the Donnelly case is a welcome change of pace. And its nice to know Cory is smiling.
I was waiting for this moment.
Choice of movies is immactulate. Watching the relationship grow is pleasant. Good piece.
Holy Shnike. The stimulation of the dream, ending in the rage, leaving Cory slick and SOL...Well done.
The part about Cory's double personality is important. Cant say why.But the Love Actually reference is deeply appreciated,and i would /hate/ to be Boromir...
Beth is a great character, the depth you put in this chapter is a great addition to the repetiore.And again, with the kids. so damn cute.
The story of her fiancee and its effect on her really hits home, very believable.And the both of them with the children, the connection is felt, a very touching moment.
When Boromir tells his birthdate the second time, it should include 'of the Third Age' if he saw how bewildered cory was. Just a thought. But again. Dialog doesnt miss a beat.
Great piece. Cory has heart.
The progression from the other story I read to this one is evident. Much more sophisticated writing style, very well done.
It was short, but good. When is the next chapter up?Author's Response: I know! I feel so bad that it's so short! I'm trying to write the next chapter up ASAP. Thanks for reviewing.
Ok, Interesting... can't wait to see what happens next! Wonderfuly written as allways!!!
Nothing wrong with kink every now-and again. :P
Tori, please check your e-mail (and I suppose your jusnk mail too while at it). :)Author's Response: I sent the email before I published. See I got you ;) Any new emails are sent right to my tablet.
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