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This is awesome, I absolutely love it!Its now in my list of faves... :D
Author's Response: Thank you very much. X3
I'm quite flattered.
Rage red and steamy.
Gabrielles pov is great. I can only imagine the mischief the two best friends got into.
The elves are delightfully aloof, and Raleighs differences from her sister are apparent, as are her similarities.
The greek was a nice touch.
The 'violent' romance as well, the teasing. Very fitting.
Saruman, darkly powerful and subtly frightening, voice and being like an earwig burrowing into your brain. Well done.
Characters captured quite well, especially merry and pippin. I can see a bit of you in this Selene, if heightened.
Good dialog though, really. Better than i could do.
Your detail of the Trollshaws was awesome in this chapter, really made me feel involved.
Gotta love Elrond.
Again, fantastic.
Transition from previous chapter is a little, how do i put it... awkward, but followable.
Impressive. The switch between Selene and Raleighs points of view is staccatto but manages not to be jarring. It flows. I imagine it as a movie.
And you capture the mind of a teenage girl quite well, I assume.
And they say boys think about sex more than girls. Pfft.
~taps on Tori's shoulder~
ahem, it's been ages in fangirl's standards anyway since you last updated. Let up on Prof. Bormoir and whatever lucky guy you have there and get busy, missy! :P
Serioudly though, come on, start getting those chapter flowing again. The suspense is killing me! And this also means I want updates for DTRA and The OUUME or however you spell that story. :))
Author's Response: Sorry EnchantessM. I'm trying my very best to get some updates rolling again. And I'll get DTRA and TOUFA updated ASAP. ;)
Hi there!
May I proposes a few corrections? And please don't take it but with my kind intention and desire for this stroy to be as awesome and flawless readability wise that it can be:
"You've had a trivial day. I am aware of your flustered state of mind. With my permission, I ask you to stay."
I would paraphrase to "You've had a trying day. I am aware of your flustered state of mind. You have my permission to stay, if you wish."
Also, it should read "with all due respect". :)
Again, I mean no offense, it's just the editor in me.
Other than that, it's lovely, and thanks for posting. I'm looking forward to your next installment.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I welcome any help I can get. Just went back to fix it. Your kindness is welcome any time. Sometimes I get side-tracked and all that when I'm writing and forget to proof read, so again, thank you.
Rather a different way of doing this, but it seems to work well.
Author's Response: Thank you :3
Ooooh please, please, PLEASE make it a love story between Glorfindel and Raleigh? There are so few good HET/love stories for Glorfindel. Plus, you need not worry about the mortal/immortal thing. If it's meant to be, I'm certain the Valar will oblige Glorfindel and give Raleigh some Limpe, which *will* grant her immortality and a chance to sail west with the golden elf-lord.
*If you want to know more about Limpe, check out the "Unfinnished Tales" - the chapter of "The chaining of Melkor".
Author's Response: I agree wholeheartedly with the whole Glorfindel thing. It would be a waste of a good elf. ;) Thank you for reviewing my stories. It's much appreciated. I'll be sure to check Limpe out thank you.