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Reviewer: EnchantessM Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/03/14 - 06:37 pm Title: Chapter 6

As the beta, I can attest it *is* a lovely chapter. Unfortunately, it did not take. Please repost. :)

Author's Response: Ugh, computer's right? I fixed it, thank you very much for helping me out. :)

Reviewer: Karlmir Stonewain Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/07/13 - 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 3

Very exciting! I look forward to your next installment.

By the way, the "corset vest" Triswyn is wearing is properly called a bodice, a laced corset sometimes worn as an outer garment.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. :) And I know I draw blanks when I'm naming proper clothing items. So thank you again. :)

Reviewer: Karlmir Stonewain Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/07/13 - 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 2

Excellent story, so far. I like your use of Rohirric phrases.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. X3 I thought it would add pizzazz.

Reviewer: Elbragol Signed [Report This]
Date: 26/05/13 - 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 1

I like this very much, it feels like Rohan and the characters are interesting.

I think that you could rethink the dates at the beginning. Elessar died in 120FA, so 116 years later would be 236FA, which sounds like a good setting for this story, whereas the dates past 1000FA do not feel right.

Tolkein made it clear that Elessar had taken war to the Haradrim and the Easterlings. To my mind that would require the taking of Umbar, as the coastal city would make an excellent base of operations in Harad. It might have rebelled, of course, or been retaken after his death.

But, hey, it's your story. Looking forward to the next installment

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reviewing. I read in my book that Elessar dies 1541 S.R. It could've been my thinking way too much about it. But I'll definitely take a closer look at it. And it was my intention to have the Haradrim and Corsairs start to appear again. But I'll look at that too. But that you again for reviewing.

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