It's very stirring. I really like the use of color and sound words. My one quibble is that "There were some that resisted" would be better grammatically.
Author's Response: *tsk* That is a very good point...yeah. Yeah, you're absolutely right. But I don't know if it's just that I've been too familiarized with "who" or what it is, but I just don't think it has the same powerful ring (no pun intended). But yeah, it really would be, blast it all...stupid poetry. Anyway, thank you!