Wow! What an awesome story! I was amazed at the depth you mananged to portray in your characters although I will admit that the time jumps could be just slightly confusing. Also, if you don't already have a beta you might want to find someone to just go through your spelling and a couple of random sentances here and there that seem jumbled and maybe italics for the thoughts. But overall it was a very well written piece and I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work. :)