Nice poem. Just a few things - tiny spelling mistake in line two as well as the summary - should be "breathe", not breath. And in the third last line it should be "for you're all I see". Nice tone and feeling to it, though.
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out my spelling mistakes, i'm a horrible speller! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks again
This is beautifully written. It very sad. Good job. Sorry this review sounds chopy it late and I'm somewhat sick and just not thinking all that well right now.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I hope you feel better. I just got over being sick a couple days ago, it's not fun.