Reviews For Family Bonds
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Reviewer: Daewen Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/10/09 - 07:20 pm Title: family bonds

Very good. I love that Estel returned to normal.

Reviewer: Alatariel Signed [Report This]
Date: 21/10/05 - 11:32 pm Title: family bonds

Ah... poor Estel. I think it was really good, I love stories about a younger middle earth version. You did a great job! (Just a few spelling errors, I was kind of confused at the beginning)

Reviewer: elessar_telcontar Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/10/05 - 09:54 pm Title: family bonds

it is a funny story but I don`t think the real estel would ever act like this. And elves would never bully the heir of Isildur only because he is human... You should think it over.

Reviewer: Ranger of the North Signed [Report This]
Date: 25/09/05 - 03:41 am Title: family bonds

Awww tell the little guy it's okay. Here's another ranger who got called names growin' up tithen mellon. And please continue. Maybe toss me a review? *smiles*

Reviewer: Anais Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/01/05 - 05:17 am Title: family bonds

Interesting subject matter. I liked this but since you have quite a few spelling and grammatical errors, I strongly suggest that you get a beta reader.

I am not sure if Aragorn would ever call Elrond "ada". Yes, Elrond did bring him up but Aragorn always knew that Arathorn was his father because Gilraen (his mother) always made a point of him knowing that, his heritage, etc.

I enjoy reading your stories but you might want to pay attention to these little things. They will make your stories a lot better!

Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/01/05 - 02:42 am Title: family bonds

Oh dear. To put it bluntly, you have a lot of grammar hiccups in this one. For instance, "*YOUR A NO GOOD HUMAN!*" should be "you're". Your is possessive, as in your house or your story. You're is short for you are, as in you're writing this story. Furthermore, you're missing a lot of punctuation, especially in quotes. œI spoke with Glorfindel today he said œHe told me about the bullies should be "I spoke with Glorfindel today," he said. "He told me about the bullies." There's a quite a few like that. And "Sir" is not really a term that would be used in Middle-earth, "my Lord" would be more appropriate. This website requires you to follow certain standards in spelling and grammar. I suggest you get yourself a beta. There's plenty who offer to beta over at the forums here, or you can look elsewhere. It will help your writing a lot, trust me.

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