Reviews For The Hope Of Arda
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Reviewer: Ravenswing14337 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/08/07 - 02:06 pm Title: Author's Note

You really need to do your reserach or get a beta who knows how. Much of your information is incorrect. The sentences are short and choppy, the grammar is equally bad. Arathron and Gilraen are not the"king & queen" of Gondor. At this point in the timeline Gondor has no sitting King, and hasn't had one for hundreds of years, - it has a Steward, and although Arathorn is REMOTELY related to Earandil (they are separated by over 3000 years in the timeline), he is in fact a direct decendent of ISILDUR (38 generations removed - with Aragorn as the 39th generation). Do your homework before you write, this much mis-information only serves to confuse and misinform others.

Reviewer: Ravenswing14337 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/08/07 - 02:05 pm Title: Author's Note

You really need to do your reserach or get a beta who knows how. Much of your information is incorrect. The sentences are short and choppy, the grammar is equally bad. Arathron and Gilraen are not the"king & queen" of Gondor. At this point in the timeline Gondor has no sitting King, and hasn't had one for hundreds of years, - it has a Steward, and although Arathorn is REMOTELY related to Earandil (they are separated by over 3000 years in the timeline), he is in fact a direct decendent of ISILDUR (38 generations removed - with Aragorn as the 39th generation). Do your homework before you write, this much mis-information only serves to confuse and misinform others.

Reviewer: PhantomsDaughter13 Signed [Report This]
Date: 28/03/06 - 03:21 pm Title: Chapter Five: Attack at the Haven

I got chills reading this! Please write more!

Reviewer: Anais Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/05 - 04:31 pm Title: Chapter 2: Telling the People

Interesting premise!
Your sentences are a bit short and somewhat disjointed; it's almost as if you break them down in the middle. Have you got a beta?
Also the chapters are quite short as well. You do get right to the point but sometimes some background information, details, etc. are a very good idea.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. That's why I am not updating. I am working on the writing. I am gonna change a few things and add new stuff. So yeah. Thanks again.

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