Reviews For Fléoden
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Reviewer: Anais Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/05 - 05:59 pm Title: The Truth

Elves don't cheat on each other. Ever! They are bonded for life and it's only very rare that they leave each other. I can only think of two as a matter of fact.
Tolkien stressed over and over again that Elves have only one mate for their whole lives. Cheating is somewhat far-fetched and you might really want to explain why Talathiel would do something like that.
Make sure to proof read your work. There are some errors.

Reviewer: Anais Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/05 - 05:53 pm Title: Daughter of the Prince

I doubt that modern words like "OK" would be used by Middle earth characters. Try to stay in character.
Have someone read your work and correct your mistakes. You have a bunch of completely unnecessary commas such as "are you, angry?"

Reviewer: HHS Signed [Report This]
Date: 20/06/05 - 11:00 pm Title: The Truth

You know what,she's one smart little girl.All she said about being a parent(biological or not))is so true in real life.BTW,why did Elldan sleep with her if he knew that she was married?Was it a fling or did he feel something for her?

Author's Response: U will see. And yes, Fléoden is very wise..

Reviewer: HHS Signed [Report This]
Date: 19/06/05 - 03:40 am Title: Daughter of the Prince

I can't stand it when an innocent child is being punished for something that wasn't her/his fault.Maybe if Legolas' wife told the truth,Fleoden would have been loved by Legolas.As for Legolas,he better not hurt her.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your comment. I agree with you...i don't like a child being punished for what is not their fault. I will take your comment into account and write the next chapter soon! (and don't worry, Legolas would never hurt a child in one of my stories)

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