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Title: Prolouge Reviewer: Shadow Maiden Signed
Give me more! This is really great.
Date: 07/12/08 11:33 am [Report This]
Title: Prolouge Reviewer: Katerinna Signed
Your story starts off very exciting and I look forward to the next chapter. Thank you for writing and sharing.
Date: 04/11/08 01:09 pm [Report This]
Title: Prolouge Reviewer: ArwenUndomiel Signed
Ooh, cliffhanger! Thrilling intro. I did notice a few little mistakes, though.

In the second sentence, you use the word 'move' twice. You also don't need to repeat his name twice in that paragraph. You should probably just say 'he could not hear or see anything'.

Melon-nin should really say mellon-nin. 'Allright' shoud just be 'alright'.

Just one more thing. In that last bit, you could probably come up with a more interesting alternative for 'said', as you have used it twice.

Aside from those little points, it was fantastic! I'm on the edge of my seat now, waiting to find out what happens. Please update soon!
Date: 11/02/06 03:57 am [Report This]
Title: Prolouge Reviewer: Alatariel Narmolanya Signed
Ahh... Major angst, major angst... Please update; I think it will delve into an interesting story.

Date: 05/01/06 09:38 pm [Report This]
Title: Prolouge Reviewer: Alatariel Ancalimon Signed
Go you! its great! i love it ..well.. LEGOLASSS! AGHH suspense is killn me! plz keep writing!

Author's Response: OMG! I have forgot about this sight! I'm so sorry! Uh... thanks for the review. I'll update tonight or tommorrow. I'm so sorry! Thanks again!
Date: 03/01/06 11:50 pm [Report This]
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