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Reviewer: Shadow Maiden Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/07/08 - 03:33 pm Title: Prolouge

Give me more! This is really great.

Reviewer: Katerinna Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/04/08 - 05:09 pm Title: Prolouge

Your story starts off very exciting and I look forward to the next chapter. Thank you for writing and sharing.

Reviewer: ArwenUndomiel Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/11/06 - 08:57 am Title: Prolouge

Ooh, cliffhanger! Thrilling intro. I did notice a few little mistakes, though.

In the second sentence, you use the word 'move' twice. You also don't need to repeat his name twice in that paragraph. You should probably just say 'he could not hear or see anything'.

Melon-nin should really say mellon-nin. 'Allright' shoud just be 'alright'.

Just one more thing. In that last bit, you could probably come up with a more interesting alternative for 'said', as you have used it twice.

Aside from those little points, it was fantastic! I'm on the edge of my seat now, waiting to find out what happens. Please update soon!

Reviewer: Alatariel Narmolanya Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/05/06 - 01:38 am Title: Prolouge

Ahh... Major angst, major angst... Please update; I think it will delve into an interesting story.

-AN

Reviewer: Alatariel Ancalimon Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/03/06 - 04:50 am Title: Prolouge

Go you! its great! i love it ..well.. LEGOLASSS! AGHH suspense is killn me! plz keep writing!

Author's Response: OMG! I have forgot about this sight! I'm so sorry! Uh... thanks for the review. I'll update tonight or tommorrow. I'm so sorry! Thanks again!

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