Just lovely! You did a wonderful job of capturing her anguish. I still think she should have chosen Celegorm over Beren, the Pansi. *grins*
Author's Response: Ahhh, Celegorm...The vicious kidnapper with cheekbones. Of course she should have chosen him Beren!
Author's Response: Hmmm, that "him" was supposed to be striked-(stricken?)-out. [s]him[/s]
You overdose on the Passive Voice but the actual content is flowing, vibrant and lovely to read. Luthien seems ethereal in her musings and you breathe life into her as a canon character. I prefer your version to Tolkiens, far less Mary Suey!
Author's Response: Good catch on the passive voice, I really need to stop letting my emotions dominate. I am beyond stunned at the compliments. Not certain that I deserve them but all the same, thank you!
That was really good. I loved how you kept it elusive until the very end. You can really get a sense of her loss. The way she waits for her death is very sadly beautiful. Nice.
Author's Response: Thank you. I was afraid I wouldn't do it justice. I'm really glad you liked it.
Just beautiful darling! There are not enough Luthien stories and yours was very true to the character. MWAH!
Author's Response: You know that your opinion means a lot. The story could use work but I'm glad you liked what there is so far.